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Martie
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A Conversation with Michelle

Remember Michelle
when you took my hand
and led me up that path
where your imaginary friends lived
and you called them names
that came from birth of language
those names ancient and preserved
that were always there
inside your head when you were two
then still walking across the meadow
of your three years
rolling with the dogs in shadowed sun.

You let me see them light up your face
and I could listen to your
one sided conversations
your brown eyes crinkled up
and I saw you before the laugh
filling up and then when the sun
hit your hair the light was so radiant
that my breath would catch

and you would shed your clothes
like a nuisance that was not part
of the feel of the air against your skin
and the fabric of dog fur and porch railings
that touched round belly and sturdy brown legs
and once I caught you looking out the screen door
at twilight in naked silhouette
when the first coyote had barked
his hunger into the canyon
and the dogs clamored around you
sniffing the air and something in you
was so wise and wonderful and wild

and you would throw your cares down
with passionate howls when you were five
said that you wished that you were dead
and I could not see what dark storm
touched your spirit
and took you so violently from sweet
when there was so much love for you
and so many wonderful things to discover
and then in your pink flannel with your cheeks
flaming and so much bravery you
found the jumping running grass
and glee became you and you touched me again
in magic with listening
there to fold me in your small arms
embrace when I was sad for you had vision
and the air around told you feelings

and you struggled so with the sanity
of girls that tormented you
with their pulled back friendship
and schools and neighborhoods were outside
your imaginationís control
and you drew cats and dogs from far and wide
to our doorstep with some inner whistle
that took in all lost and lonely things

in your eight years you took me
and rearrange all my feelings
and threw them up like feathers
to dance around you
and then you were gone
and you were no longer a breath
and it was like your mother
went with you and what was left
was only part of me
missing you.

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
bsquirrel
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Martie,
I could see this girl (this daughter) running free in the grass under a coyote night. I could see her becoming confused, growing away and into herself. Not only do I surrender to this one, but I lay in the grass all stretched out myself.  

Awesome!

Mike
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Martie~
The most definite YES I can vote.

'in your eight years you took me
and rearrange all my feelings
and threw them up like feathers
to dance around you
and then you were gone'

And your heart keeps the vigil after
all these years .... and she will always
be that child of the 'jumping running grass'.

You are remarkable, my friend.
Love you, sister of my heart.
~*Marge*~


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3 posted 06-25-2000 10:50 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Fabulous, Martie. I remember this one very well, how could I ever forget it. It touched me somewhere deep inside my heart and still does. HUGS

Denise

[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 06-25-2000).]
Mike
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A truly special poem by a special person.
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5 posted 06-26-2000 12:05 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Ah, yes. Book this one, Martie.
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6 posted 06-26-2000 01:44 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh Martie, this is so touching, so sadly-beautiful.

voting

Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive,
my body goes on, my spirit has died,
and I though alive, feel dead inside.

"Rose Petal"


[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 06-26-2000).]
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7 posted 06-26-2000 02:42 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Ah, I too remember this one (very well)

I wish for you all the best that life can give



All my love,
Jeffrey

Kit McCallum
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Oh Martie ... the is so packed with imagery
and emotion! My mind is just whirling with
visions of this lovely angel who you
described so beautifully as one with nature.
Exquisite writing Martie ... just beautiful! (click)  

Best wishes,
/Kit
Martie
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This poem is very special to me, for obvious reasons...thank you all for responding with your hearts...Although she died a long time ago, the lessons she taught me in her life and through her death still grow.
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I will never forget the way I felt the first time I read this poem ...
and feel again now...
there could be no book with out this one to reflect you
love ya
jm
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Wow....I had pictures caring me through this piece of this sweet little angel of nature!! Somehere deep inside it touched me in a mysterious way!!  Enjoyed this very much!!!  In the book Martie I hope this makes!!
Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown
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do you know how powerful this poem is martie? just at the memory of it from when I read it in open, when I clicked on it to vote on it here, tears sprang up...this is beautiful
Martie
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Thank you jm, I hope you're right!

Bridgette--thank you... what a sweet comment!

I am touched by your comment corrizon...thank you!
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It is my heart saying yes, this must be in the book.
Liz
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Liz--your heart and mine!
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Dear Martie,
I joined this site today because of this poem. I had to vote for it: it really touched me. I visit here and read but usually don't get involved.
Now, though,I look forward to reading more of your work. Thank you,

Grinwhicket
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oops! Had to do this again because I forgot to check off VOTE! Sorry...
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I could see this sweet little angel in your words, a sadly beautiful poem.  This one needs to be in the book!!!  Bonnie
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A most heartfelt tribute to you and your daughter/angel.  You have my vote.
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So deeply touching and beautiful! Gets my vote for sure.
Martie
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I just want to thank you for replying to my poem of heart...and they all are, from the heart, but this one more so.
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Martie, Martie...this gave me wrenches in my guts...BIG hugs to you my friend...

this is the most beautiful tribute.

K
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That's good, Martie.. I hope I will have a daughter like yours if I ever marry to a woman I love one day..

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.


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Kamla--she was a beautiful child and I'm so glad I knew her, even for that short time.

James--If you marry a woman you love, and if your have children, they will be beautiful!
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