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bsquirrel
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0 posted 06-24-2000 06:57 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

An old'un from my new hampshire days.

Mike

-through a cracked pane-
I look through a cracked pane and see blurred color.
The trees are no longer wood
But large stout strokes of brown
Swimming in jagged detail against spider cracks.
The air is a combination of yellow and green
Mixed to a blue that changes continually,
Where clouds float through the sea of it,
And dip at the junction of broken glass.
White fields spotted with brown and green trees
And sunlight and frozen-over
Lakes and ponds and stopped brooks
Try to orient themselves in the fracture.

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Love this.....it brings terrific images.  Bonnie
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The air is a combination of yellow and green
Mixed to a blue that changes continually,
Where clouds float through the sea of it,
And dip at the junction of broken glass.
White fields spotted with brown and green trees
And sunlight and frozen-over
Lakes and ponds and stopped brooks
Try to orient themselves in the fracture.
-----------------
and now I too have looked thru a cracked pane...
it was perfect,
butterfly slippers thanks you  
later-imagery-eyes-gator
jm/bs
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3 posted 06-25-2000 02:06 AM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi bsquirrel,

You described it so wonderfully, your cracked pane of glass, enjoyed it very much, thank you for sharing.

Cerenity
bsquirrel
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And thanks to all three of you for reading it.  

Mike
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Wonderful, wonderful imagery!
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really amazing images. much enjoyed this poem.

"An abyss that lasted creation A circus complete with all fools
Foundations that lasted the ages Then ripped apart at their roots"
joy division
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LittleSquirrel~
You rock with the images in this one.
Deer tiptoes gingerly through the white fields.
~*Marge*~


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bsquirrel
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8 posted 06-25-2000 09:24 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

And thank you, three more.   Seriously, though, I appreciate it, and am glad you enjoyed.

Mike
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Mike~ This is very cool.   I liked it a lot.  -SEA   ( you know I voted )

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB


bsquirrel
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10 posted 06-26-2000 11:25 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Hi, Sea (Hi-C?), thanks for stopping by. I can get used to your life, laughter and love.  

Mike
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11 posted 06-28-2000 02:41 PM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

I like seeing life through a new persepctive.

Good'un
~Heather
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As do I.  

Joy
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Thanks to both of you.   (this is turning into a real yellow-face convention, isn't it?)

Mike
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missed this the first time.  Better late than never?
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B.E.A.U.T.F.U.L.
I LOVE the imagery in this!!! I see it!
bsquirrel
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S'en,
Definitely, and thanks for finding it.  

Chris,
Thanks for the kind words.

Mike
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yep, a keeper.  nicely written.
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Yes, very well written, Mike!

Denise
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It was as though the "outside" (of your windowpane) turned into a Monet...the way you described the softness and shadings of colour and the blurring of the tree's trunks...very nicely painted, Mike.

**  oops...forgot to vote  

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau



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bsquirrel
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20 posted 08-13-2000 03:26 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks, all. It's a good thing I checked back on these old threads -- I appreciate your keeping them alive for me.   May everyone who submitted at least get one poem into the book.

Mike
 
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