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Martie
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0 posted 2000-06-23 09:16 PM



The Magnitude of her Unfolding

She stayed out late one day in spring
whispering sighs into the fragrant sky
for she was sixteen and dreams danced
down the dusty weed choked path with her.

It was dinner time
and the air had cooled
but her pounding heart and footsteps
blazed in youthful ardor.

She turned and was bathed in twilight’s glow
floating down a street oh it seemed like floating
of houses stained pink and mauve
against the light of sunset.

She could feel the secrets
that touched her from the window’s glow
of mother’s rocking children’s laughter
and those nesting families touched her soul.

She could feel the undertow
pulling her up into a woman
and she couldn’t say why
she cried into the darkening sky.

A girl is a mighty strong thing
she thought and started running
her bright hair dancing back and forth
and her feet echoing fast go fast.

Her breath felt clean
and her colt legs leaped bursting
bursting was her spirit
on that late night in early spring

the night she glimpsed
the magnitude of her unfolding.


© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 2000-06-23 09:20 PM


Who could possibly forget this one?! My vote's in.....

In order to keep a true perspective of one's importance, everyone should have a dog that will worship him and a cat that will ignore him.

Denise
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2 posted 2000-06-23 09:36 PM


One of my most favorite, Martie!

Denise

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-06-23 09:37 PM


Indeed who could ever forget this gem...
the title alone held my memory
perfection Martie, truly
jm

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
4 posted 2000-06-23 10:14 PM


Alright !
My 'almost' favorite of all of yours.
Goodness, I can't choose ...
you know I love them ALL !

Martie, your talent warrants it's own book, my dear friend.
(but we're sure glad to have you in this one !)  
Love you~
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com



serenity blaze
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5 posted 2000-06-23 10:19 PM


Dang, I wish I could be like Marge...will ya settle for a hip-hip-hooray (and a vote?)  

I have loved every word of this-- possibly BEFORE it was written...exquisite, I was hoping you would, and ya did...

Happy voter exits now...

Mike
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6 posted 2000-06-24 12:16 PM


*smiling*   I also remember this one well....
glad to see it posted.

Mike
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7 posted 2000-06-24 12:16 PM


*smiling*   I also remember this one well....
glad to see it posted.

bsquirrel
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8 posted 2000-06-24 12:21 PM


Beautiful, graceful, and just a little sad.

Mike

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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9 posted 2000-06-24 07:06 PM


Nobody forgets this one, it is so remarkable as only you could write it.
A vote from me
Liz

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

10 posted 2000-06-24 07:30 PM


Wow Martie...breathless again...my vote of course...

K

~Sleeping Beauty never knew how lucky she really was~ (Me)

X Angel
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11 posted 2000-06-24 07:55 PM


oooooh I never saw this before!
awesome
awesome
awesome

~Heather

Dark Angel
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12 posted 2000-06-24 08:50 PM


wow Martie, you leave me floating when I read your poetry. Beautiful as always.  
you have my vote  

My grief lies onward and my joy behind
(Shakespeare)

CocoBaci
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13 posted 2000-06-24 08:52 PM


Beautiful
=) Coco =)

Martie
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14 posted 2000-06-25 01:45 PM


Balladeer--Thanks for the Memory.

Denise--thank you for letting me know.

Janet Marie--Your replies are always so perfect.

Marge--you are so good for me!

Serenity--Hip hip hooray is wonderful!

Mike--thanks for the smile and the memory.

bsquirrel--growing up is a little sad.

Liz--thanks for your constant support..you are a wonderful friend!

Kamla the breathless--thank you!  

Heather--thanks for three awesomes!

Dark Angel--Thanks for such a lovely comment.

Coco--thank you for beautiful!

Christopher J
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15 posted 2000-06-25 07:50 PM


Yep, this one has my vote!
Dark Angel
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16 posted 2000-07-08 07:23 AM


had to read this again *sigh* Bumping it back up!  

Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive,
my body goes on, my spirit has died
and I though alive, feel dead inside.

"Rose Petal"

BSC
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17 posted 2000-07-16 08:59 AM


Beautiful!!!!!
Geoffrey Sonnen
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18 posted 2000-07-16 04:04 PM


Beautiful, Martie ! Innocent Freedom ahhhh... could use some of that.

Thanks, Geoffrey


Corazon
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19 posted 2000-07-17 02:22 PM


voting here, this is perfection  
Not A Poet
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20 posted 2000-07-17 02:34 PM


Oh, I like very much.

Thanks,
Pete

Sudhir Iyer
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
21 posted 2000-07-17 02:37 PM


O WOW O WOW O WOW

Wowing all around, Martie...

regards, sudhir

jamesjiao
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Backwaters of Avalon
22 posted 2000-07-17 10:18 PM


Martie..

It's such a vivid description of a girl's inner being.. a strong sense of a female.. really enjoyed it.. i shall give a vote.

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.



jamesjiao
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Backwaters of Avalon
23 posted 2000-07-17 10:19 PM


Martie

It's such a vivid description of the inner being of a girl.. a strong sense of female.. good read.. shall vote.

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.



Romy
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since 2000-05-28
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Plantation, Florida
24 posted 2000-07-17 11:28 PM


VOTE for a job well done!
Debbie

AVANTI
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25 posted 2000-07-18 12:10 PM


very well written...
I like it a lot...


If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


Martie
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26 posted 2000-07-18 11:10 AM


Thank you so much for your kind replies to this poem.
ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
27 posted 2000-07-18 11:50 AM


Definitely a poetic work of art, just wonderful, got my vote all the way.......
Parker
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ON
28 posted 2000-07-21 10:28 PM


Martie, one of my fav's..... voting.  
hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA
29 posted 2000-07-22 04:45 PM


Martie....I knew this poem as soon as I read the title, it struck me so strong when I read it before. I think this poem has to remain amoung my favorite of all your work and would make a fine addition to any book  
Martie
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30 posted 2000-07-22 08:53 PM


ethome and Haleyja...thank you so much for the vote and for liking this poem...I like it too...and Ruth, I'm so glad to see you...thank you for remembering this.
Kit McCallum
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31 posted 2000-07-24 11:26 AM


Oh Martie ... such beautiful visions ran through my mind as I followed this young girl's awakening. Lovely!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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