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brian madden
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0 posted 06-23-2000 03:12 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for brian madden

You were the brightest star
to shine through the thickets of grey,
the thorns failed scratch our surfaces.
I sunk beneath into a vacancy
of conquered space, as a moth drawn
to the flame longing to be burnt in reality.
In the fading light of day I retreat
to face the nocturnal frost.
The pavements wait buried in autumn leaves,
their brittle carcasses struggle in a war of wilt.
Everything is far removed,
In this space
traffic hunts as preying wolves
in packs of futile persecution.

Overhead the sky suffocates.
Its infinite void tortures the mind
to capture. Crawling through weathered
dreams I halt, a rabbit in the headlights,
memorised by a heavenly satellite on ice;
the only star radiating empty space.
Everything is far removed,
in the faults of this hell purity dazzles,
as a moth guided in paralysis to its celestial epicentre.

I am given to dreaming of memories
we shared so long past, lost in faults
of this sorrow I felt only peace in the emptiness.
Through the shadows your spirit embraces
my frozen shell allowing me
the courage to continue. In hope secure
we are of the heavens tonight, great distances
can not break the bounds that tie our hearts.
We live in a garden delicate and tender to celebrate,
existing unknown, where everything else is far removed.



A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral.
Antoine de Saint-Exupéry
© Copyright 2000 brian madden - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 06-23-2000 05:12 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I am given to dreaming of memories
we shared so long past, lost in faults
of this sorrow I felt only peace in the emptiness.
Through the shadows your spirit embraces
my frozen shell allowing me
the courage to continue. In hope secure
we are of the heavens tonight, great distances
can not break the bounds that tie our hearts.
We live in a garden delicate and tender to celebrate,
existing unknown, where everything else is far removed.
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WOW the imagery in this is STUNNNING Bri..
man you just do this so well,
and the emotions of that last verse
are written with such depth...
you make this look so easy

awe-by you again
eve  
insect
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2 posted 06-24-2000 08:11 PM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

This is excellent brian!
I hope it goes in the book.
Rex Allen McCoy
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3 posted 06-25-2000 12:54 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

this shows a lot of talent ... and a lot of feeling
I too, hope that it makes the book
Sven
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4 posted 06-25-2000 01:20 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

This is excellent Brian. . . you have really captured the feelings well here with your imagery. . .

Very well done. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Christopher J
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5 posted 06-25-2000 01:44 AM       View Profile for Christopher J   Email Christopher J   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher J

I have absolutely no idea how you came up with such a thoughtful poem...it has my vote!
CMGrimm
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6 posted 06-25-2000 10:10 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Great job Brian...

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.


brian madden
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7 posted 06-25-2000 03:44 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Jan, I hoping that the last verse did sound too cliched, like a happy ending after the build up. REally glad you approve of the ending and the whole poem. thanks for your wonderful response.

insect, thanks for your reply.

Rex, thank you Rex for your kind words. I am glad that feelings come through in the words.

Sven, thank you for your wonderful response. The night was really visual, and bleak, very haunting. I am glad that showed through in the words.

Chris, thanks for the vote. Much appreciated. Well I love that person dearly and miss them badly, but the presense is always with me. Strong emotions helped write this poem. Thanks for your reply.

CM, thanks for your reply.







"An abyss that lasted creation A circus complete with all fools
Foundations that lasted the ages Then ripped apart at their roots"
joy division
Irish Rose
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8 posted 06-25-2000 04:26 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

ok, you've been holding your best until the book idea huh? No, seriously, this is outstanding.
It nearly drugged me with imagery, and that's a great feeling.
keep it up.

Kathleen

"How do I love thee? Let
me count the ways.
I love thee to the depth and breadth and height
My soul can reach, when feeling out of sig
Denise
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9 posted 06-25-2000 08:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Fabulous writing, Brian! Very well done!

Denise
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10 posted 06-25-2000 09:06 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Yes, sir! One more vote here.......
Sudhir Iyer
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11 posted 06-26-2000 01:06 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

I am given to dreaming of memories
we shared so long past, lost in faults
of this sorrow I felt only peace in the emptiness.
Through the shadows your spirit embraces
my frozen shell allowing me
the courage to continue. In hope secure
we are of the heavens tonight, great distances
can not break the bounds that tie our hearts.
We live in a garden delicate and tender to celebrate,
existing unknown, where everything else is far removed.

.....

Extraordinarily Stunning as always, brian...

great work...

regards and a (click)
sudhir.



Death, be not proud, though some have called thee,
Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so;

- John Donne
LoveBug
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12 posted 06-26-2000 01:11 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

This is a beautiful, heart-felt piece. It belongs in our book!

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea
Mike
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13 posted 06-26-2000 01:13 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Very nicely done.  Enjoyed muchly.
brian madden
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14 posted 06-27-2000 06:35 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Kathleen, you caught me out. You know what they say always hold on to the best till last. LOL. Drugged on imagery? sounds like fun, might give it a try. thanks for your wonderful response.

dsnyder, thanks for your reply.

Balladeer, thank you for reading and for your vote. I promise to keep all my election promises when I am elected into office..oops wrong specch. forget the last part.  

Sudhir, thank you for your kind words and for the click.

LoveBug, thank you for your lovely comments.

Mike, thank you for your lovely reply and
glad that you enjoyed my little poem.  





"but for the lovers, their arms Round the griefs of the ages, Who pay no praise or wages Nor heed my craft or art"
Dylan Thomas.
Martie
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15 posted 06-27-2000 07:23 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Adding my vote here, Brian...you have drenched me with your fabulous imagery and I'm still trying to dry off.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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16 posted 06-27-2000 10:51 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Beautifully done Brian, you weave with the hand of an artist and the heart of a poet...a breathtaking couple~
X Angel
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17 posted 06-28-2000 03:37 PM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

WOW
I am stunned! This was really, really good. I liked the sort of train of thought, ramble feel yet it had structure and balance.
*Tipping hat...*

~Heather
Dawn Eclipse
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18 posted 06-28-2000 05:40 PM       View Profile for Dawn Eclipse   Email Dawn Eclipse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dawn Eclipse

That was a great poem!  There is nothing I find more beauty in than the night sky.  

"The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper. "

Eden Phillpotts

*Cassandr
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19 posted 07-03-2000 04:02 PM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

WOW BRIAN

AWESOME read here, very, very nice work, a must see in PRINT,

Love,  Cerenity
dgvarner
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20 posted 08-07-2000 03:35 PM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

as usual...your writing leaves me speechless..but that last paragraph was especially "wow"  

dg

"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran

poutprincess
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21 posted 08-08-2000 11:17 AM       View Profile for poutprincess   Email poutprincess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poutprincess

i agree with everyone above....
this poem breathes and lives....its intricate and delicate....and very much enjoyed.
~Dawn

whatcha doing in this darkness baby
when you know love will set you free?
will you stay in the sea forever
Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live
Parker
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22 posted 08-08-2000 12:01 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

I am given to dreaming of memories
we shared so long past, lost in faults
of this sorrow I felt only peace in the emptiness...

this amazing piece had a sadness to me, yet a little hope, wrapped up in all the wonderfull images..

Great for the book.... voted

Parker
 
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