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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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I Once Believed in Fairy Tales I once believed in fairy tales with wondrous happy ends In sprites and gnomes and goblins and imaginary friends In magic wands and falling stars that make a dream come true I just couldn’t figure out where all the stars were falling to Ingenuous and tenuous And enviously new I used to think my heroes were among the best of men I thought that truth and honor were the words I could defend So innocent were my ideals, so resolutely fed That when deception tripped me up, I landed on my head So tenderly ingenuous And tenuously bred Battered, tattered, splattered, and well shattered was the dream Rumpled wings, a broken heart and empty self-esteem I weathered gale with tethered sail and tenets duly sworn What life unveils of fairy tales were pages cruelly torn Ingenuous and tenuous So strenuously worn I walk with grandson hand in hand reliving childhood dreams And marvel at his cleverness and never-ending schemes The magic of a falling star's a claim I can’t refute To now explain his future pain’s a question that is mute His tenderness so tenuous Ingenuously cute! Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 06-23-2000).] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
this is a beautiful poem Elizabeth so innocent yet forboding got my vote  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Liz, this is masterfully crafted, the scene with your grandson very poignant. Lovely piece of writing! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Very well planned and written. But then you always do that. I particularly enjoyed the evolving refrain, no that's not quite correct but what it sort of looks like. Geez, guess I'm rambling a bit here. Well I really enjoyed the read. Thanks. Pete |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Wonderfully written. Start the presses. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
To live within the eyes of a child where bunnys hop and horses run wild and again to dream the dreams of hope and allow for me my life to cope... Ah Elizabeth,  just see what you do... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
walk with grandson hand in hand reliving childhood dreams And marvel at his cleverness and never-ending schemes The magic of a falling star's a claim I can’t refute To now explain his future pain’s a question that is mute His tenderness so tenuous Ingenuously cute! a wonderful poem, aw to once again have the innocence of a child. excellently written A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Liz, I loved this the first time I read it, and I love it still! Great work. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh, I'm so glad you posted this...I love the way you wrote it...excellent!! |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
perfect elizabeth Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~ Still beautiful are these thoughts. Pricelessly portrayed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
A beautiful and very well structured poem. Great job Elizabeth  |
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Christopher J Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 94 |
What a wonderful poem! Well done! I look foward to reading more of yours.. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I really liked this...the format was neat! Good, good, good job!!  ~Heather |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
My dear Liz, The words from that loving heart of yours just seem to always dance so gracefully across the page with such elegants and beauty I always leave with such a wonderful feeling inside, thank you so much. Love, Cerenity |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, If I could vote for this twice I would. Just wonderful. Love Sy |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What an addition to the book |
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~Enigma~ Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 44St Cloud, MN |
Absolutely wonderful! |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
What can I say?!! ^_^ dear Elizabeth, you KNOW I will vote for this... ^^ Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Elizabeth your writings are so wonderfully written...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
AWESOME!! I love this... miss you Lizzy... K |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I enjoyed reading each and every one of your comments, which I hadn't noticed until today. I appreciate all of your remarks. Thank you all so very much. Liz |
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