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Into The Night She Cries

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Christopher
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Into the Night She Cries



While camped upon
A sunset beach
Jaded orbs searching the sky,
A lonely woman
Upward reached
For the heavens to reply...

To questions hurled
At the night
So forbidding, black and bold.
A bleeding heart
Streamed red in blight
With her queries ringing cold.

‘Release this heart of suffering,’
These carmine sighs
Her painful words.
‘I’ve no more lily songs to sing.’
Still,
No echoes back were heard.

Her glance fell to the barren sand
While her hope transformed to ache.
A single tear dripped,
Crystal-grand,
As she dived in ocean’s wake.

Her breath stained cobalt,
Swallowed whole
Her mind lit crimson, burning.
Cerulean she arched her soul
Into a surfaced turning.

And as she knifed
The mirrored skin,
Reflected darkness
Shimmered,
Into an alabaster grin
From a star-son
rendered dimmer.

It crashed headlong
Into the sea
In roiling iridescence.
Cascades of nighttime
Falling free
Washed about
In phosphorescence.

And floating there
In seafoamed arms
A man
Cloaked pearl and star dust.
With azured eyes,
Unspoken charms
And a smile colored in trust.

‘How could you leave,’
She asked this man.
‘From the skies' warm touch to part?’
‘You have something
‘She never can,’

He spoke.
‘See, love you have my heart.’









[This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 06-23-2000).]
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Christopher
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This is reposted from the English Workshop. Any and all suggestions are welcome! PLease, belt me hard!  
Poet deVine
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2 posted 06-22-2000 05:56 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Ah...lovely..perfection...no belting allowed on this one!  
Nicole
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Her breath stained cobalt,
Swallowed whole
Her mind lit crimson, burning.
Cerulean she arched her soul
Into a surfaced turning.


What a vision, amazing.
Wow, Chris

-and-  (for the sappy romantic in me)  

‘How could you leave,’
She asked this man.
‘From the skies' warm touch to part?’
‘You have something
‘She never can,’
He spoke.
‘See love, you have my heart.’


OOOF  Yeah, that just gets ya right *here*.

This has skads of imagery in it, and just dances on the line of 'not enough' vs. 'too much'. I like to have 'blanks' for my imagination to fill in, instead of being hand held and forced to view something a certain way.  That, of course, is my own personal opinion and taste.

With this, the poem took my imagination up to that 'line' and let it go...where it wished.

Lots, bunches

N.
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4 posted 06-22-2000 06:22 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

"I've no more lily songs to sing,"

This is amazing, Chris...just when I think I've  read your best, there you go again.
and by the way, I am particularly grateful that this was not a sestina...love to you, me friend...me smiling now.
X Angel
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5 posted 06-22-2000 06:31 PM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

let's start with my feet, a warm sensation there that tingled up through me to explode into the top of my head in an electrical shock of delight. (in Lay-Angel talk...I got goosebumps!!)

this is what reading this did to me. It was gorgeous Chris!

~Heather
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6 posted 06-22-2000 07:29 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Hmmm..you know that ICQ message I sent you? Well I figured it out...lol.

This is a moving piece my friend. You never fail to move me beyond words. *bowing to the master*    

M.


[This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 06-22-2000).]
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awesome amazing astonishing
triple A...
and im not even the teacher ...
perfect chris...
dont change a thing
jm
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I think it is hauntingly lovely, just the way it is, Chris. A striking title, as well.

~ Claire



Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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9 posted 06-22-2000 07:55 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Said it already....


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10 posted 06-22-2000 08:17 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Christopher, my friend~
Almost too perfect for words.
Such artistry with your words -
simply exquisite.
Much admiration here, dear poet.
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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11 posted 06-22-2000 08:49 PM       View Profile for Christopher J   Email Christopher J   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher J

..excellent, i just wish i could hear lilies sing also, great imagery..i loved it.
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*BELT* There I belted ya hard! But it's not cause of your poem    No, really Chris, this is some superb work buddy!
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13 posted 06-22-2000 09:21 PM       View Profile for Kellsue   Email Kellsue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kellsue

Wonderful work...don't change a thing!!

~Kelly

~Kellsue

Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens

We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill

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14 posted 06-22-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

I'm going in search of this beach....stars
turning into men...wow what a thought  

Awesome images, I was captivated by her torment and despair and the last lines were
as beautiful as the stars they fell from.
  
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15 posted 06-23-2000 12:00 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Chris, this is beautiful hon, tender, moving, heartfelt and a must for the book!!  

I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)

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Chris, I do think one thing needs to be changed here!
She needs to be ME!  
But seriously, I really enjoyed this a lot.
As always, your pieces never fail me.
This is what I call "Grand, impressive beauty"
So take that for a "belt"  
Nice to see you here again!


~Sheri
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Changes? Let's see...where do I start?

Hmmm....Can I put my name as the author  

No, seriously Christopher, This one is perfect, Just perfect

All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep


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18 posted 06-23-2000 01:40 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Very moving Christopher. Beautiful writing!

My grief lies onward and my joy behind
(Shakespeare)
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19 posted 06-24-2000 01:31 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

"Is the heart worth the empty hand??"

This was an beautifully provoking poem dear Chris...but painful all the same...Shall I dare tiptoe in perfection??  


Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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20 posted 06-24-2000 01:40 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I can see why you're smiling in the picture. I would be too after writing a poem that so confirmed my gifts and blew away most poems in the forum. Wow -- all I can say.

Mike
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21 posted 06-24-2000 07:17 AM       View Profile for AVANTI   Email AVANTI   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AVANTI

I am moved...
This was a beautiful poem and you picked your words well.
great work...

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

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22 posted 06-24-2000 10:07 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Perfect,as is
It will be published
Liz
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Wow again!

Thank you everyone for the uplifting comments! The above is one of the reasons I love this home so much. Always (unless I'm off on one of my tirades) a place of warm welcomes and hearty applause! How can anyone not glow with praise such as this?

Chris
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Very nice Chris. I really enjoyed. Thanks.

Pete
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