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CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14
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0 posted 2000-06-21 04:52 PM


Last night
I watched a teardrop
slowly trace it's way
across your lovely
cheek.
It hovered a moment
at the tip of your nose
as if to tease me
and make me feel ashamed
for hurting you so badly.
Finally it broke itself free
and came to a rest
on your soft pillow
to join countless others
of it's kind that I
never knew existed.

Christopher M. Grimm





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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
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Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 2000-06-21 05:03 PM


Ouch.

Waht an incredible story of introspection revealing. Wow Chris, I'm surprised this was so strong, ones this short usually don't impact so firmly.

Chris

X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
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2 posted 2000-06-21 08:15 PM


*sigh*
I have cried countless rivers of those tears, that he never even knew exsisted. And if he did know, he would alternately feel shamed for me, and uncomfortable. Never realising that to hold me and wipe those tears away could have made a world of difference in a fragile heart. And now, he holds not the key to enter my heart anymore, and maybe just maybe we can chalk it up to a lack of attention to a small detail like tears.
Awesome poem CM  
~Heather

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-06-21 09:49 PM


you so good at this...
so very.
jm

Honeybee
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4 posted 2000-06-21 09:55 PM



~Chris~

Your best to date!  What a heartbreaking poem, so much said with so few words, very well written and expressed.  You have a way with words my friend! This has my vote  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
5 posted 2000-06-21 09:59 PM


ChrisG~
You already know that I loved the tenderness of this one.  
I still do !
~*Marge*~


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Balladeer
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6 posted 2000-06-21 10:37 PM


It takes real talent to put so much emotion into so few words. You certainly have the talent.....and my vote.
netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
7 posted 2000-06-22 01:53 AM


Chris this is absolutely wonderful

I hope it makes it into the book
I have not put in two as I am afraid
if I do, I won't make one, LOL

I cast votes and lose position, but I think
I shall just go ahead and post another poem

Maybe a whole bunch of short ones will make
it.

I wish we could make poetry a HOT item
and be able to sell  eBooks.  It is one
thing I do on the net but I tell people
that they do not sell well, which to me
is a darn insult. LOL

~netswan


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JP
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343
Loomis, CA
8 posted 2000-06-22 03:37 AM


Oh yeah, this one definitely gets my vote.  Very tender, very sad...  well writ my friend.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 685
USA
9 posted 2000-06-22 07:19 AM


Thanks everybody.....

Having my work read and responded to by poets as talented as those in here really make me proud of my work and give me lots of good reasons to work harder...thanks you guys...

chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



Colin
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Callington, Cornwall, England
10 posted 2000-06-22 09:21 AM


What can I say that hasn't been said about this poem already? It's great... there, I found a word no-ones used  

Eric.

"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

CMGrimm
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11 posted 2000-06-24 08:43 AM


Thanks Eric..

chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
12 posted 2000-06-25 02:30 AM


Too bad we can't vote twice for a poem.
But, doesn't mean we can't send one back to
the top - In case, someone hasn't seen it.

~netswan

linda munday
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 315
Adelaide, Australia
13 posted 2000-06-25 07:07 AM


Very emotive for such a short space.  Have a lump in my throat.
Linda M.
p.s. I voted for it.

Holly
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since 2000-05-12
Posts 127
Arkansas
14 posted 2000-06-25 09:52 AM


Chris-
Well once again you have left me in awe and just sitting here thinking. I believe that is what poetry is suppose to do...and you have certainly achieved that my friend. The pure, raw emotions felt in this one just hits me...I really like this one Chris! Certainly one of the best of yours ever!!  
-Holly


I know well what I am fleeing from but not what I am in search of.
Michel de Montaigne


CMGrimm
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USA
15 posted 2000-06-25 10:25 AM


Thanks netswan...I need all the help I can get...lol
thanks linda...you are very sweet

and thank you Holly....ouknowiluvya


chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



Denise
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16 posted 2000-06-25 08:43 PM


This is definitely one of my favorites of yours, Chris! Wonderful powerful writing!

Denise

CMGrimm
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17 posted 2000-06-26 09:51 AM


Thanks Denise...

chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
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INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
18 posted 2000-06-29 09:25 AM


good poem...
well written...


If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 685
USA
19 posted 2000-07-02 11:29 AM


Thanks Avanti

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



demoninlove
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 211
Dehradun
20 posted 2000-07-02 12:28 PM


You said it - touched that hidden secret within most of us to the core - Why do we do things like that I wonder? Maybe because we dont understand!
Deepak Menon


ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
21 posted 2000-07-02 12:50 PM


This poem is just full of impact!!
Great stuff, Chris!!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Mike
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since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

22 posted 2000-07-02 07:04 PM


Well written.  Nicely done.
CMGrimm
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23 posted 2000-07-03 07:26 AM


Thanks lizzy, demon, and mike.

chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 685
USA
24 posted 2000-08-07 10:26 PM


just trying to get one more round....lol
dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
25 posted 2000-08-08 01:08 AM


wow..that last line tore my heart up....

this is such sorrow for pain you didnt know existed...

and good for you for wanting one more round..no shame no shame!  

great poem..love it  

dg

"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran


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