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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Alone At Last Left alone at last my love, you hold my hand so tight. The doctor gave his last report, I've lost this mortal fight. I feel my life slipping away; see that truth in your eyes. You watch me with such tenderness to count my breathless sighs. The last few months has made me glad, to leave this cancerous place. And the last thing I want to see in this life is your sweet and smiling face. With a moan I take my last breath my eyes tell you it is so and closing forever in this life I watch you let me go. [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 06-21-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh boy ... tears starting here Poet deVine! Beautiful sentiments, and the format trailing off at the end makes such a dramatic and emotional closing. Crying and clicking now ... (loved it) Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-21-2000).] |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Fantastic PDV.... chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Yes, a heart touching sentiment. And the format, trailing off at the end does add a great deal. Thanks. Pete |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Sharon... silence... Wow. The way you trailed the words off at the end... wow. I'm struck speechless. I may even have a tear rolling down my face. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow Sharon very touching and sad poem, but beautiful!! loved it My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
sniff, sniff...Oh man, rips at the heart strings it does! Sad, but so well written and touching! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Beautiful, deVine one. In order to keep a true perspective of one's importance, everyone should have a dog that will worship him and a cat that will ignore him. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sigh. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*ditto sigh* jm |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh PDV, this brought tears to my eyes. It must be in our book! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 I enjoyed it! A vivid portrait of a lover's last touch. Sob...Bob <>< |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very touching and well written, Sharon. Denise |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
*hushed silence* Wow.. great poem Sharon.. the tightening format matches the tightness in my throat.. Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I think there are many people that need to read this ... very sad and touching memories |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
*sniffle* it seems that you've uncovered the most sentimental of all my fearful thoughts... that of leaving the one i love and seeing the tears in her eyes... stirring and beautifully melancholy... just what i love in poetry... sincerely, a sad tomato |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I can't see the screen through the blur, thank goodness for tissues (and that I don't have to look when I type  )Wow, Sharon.. |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
sharon; you are so gifted! This poem is alive with the sadness of deaths goodbye. Ellie |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Uh, Kleenex please! WOW! Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
of course, it could only come from you... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
I don't mind at all telling I voted for this masterpiece! All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
PdV - Wow...This is such an incredible poem. As I've just come in from saying my last goodbyes to a dear friend, the tears are flowing freely. This is just so beautiful. Bonnie |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Wonderfully written. Another exceptional poem. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Poet deVine, This is sad, but I do beleive its very well true how someone could feel this way. Wonderful and powerful writting, thank you for sharing. Love, Cerenity |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
This is simply wonderful. . . goes through a lot of emotions. . . only you could make it this way. . . Superb. . . -------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
.......silent with words stuck in my throat! beautifully written. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
My mom HAD breast cancer, and the thought of her death had always crossed my mind, but now through Gods healing she no longer has cancer! But I pray and feel for all those who have lost a loved one like this and who will loose one, this poem reflects those last few minutes of life! sad but lovely poem! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wow..."i watch you let me go..." you just broke my heart... beautifully written.. dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
This is really very very nice Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Kellsue Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 210Waukesha, WI USA |
I'm speechless... this was so touching and brought tears to my eyes. Wonderful writing PD...just wonderful. ~Kelly You can give without loving but you cannot love without giving There is no danger of developing eye-strain from looking on the bright side of things |
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