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Small Pain in My Chest

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Balladeer
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0 posted 06-21-2000 01:41 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

      

The soldier boy was sitting calmly underneath that tree.
As I approached it, I could see him beckoning to me.
The battle had been long and hard and lasted through the night
And scores of figures on the ground lay still by morning's light.

"I wonder if you'd help me, sir", he smiled as best he could.
"A sip of water on this morn would surely do me good.
We fought all day and fought all night with scarcely any rest -
A sip of water for I have a small pain in my chest."

As I looked at him, I could see the large stain on his shirt
All reddish-brown from his warm blood mixed in with Asian dirt.
"Not much", said he. "I count myself more lucky than the rest.
They're all gone while I just have a small pain in my chest."

"Must be fatigue", he weakIy smiled. "I must be getting old.
I see the sun is shining bright and yet I'm feeling cold.
We climbed the hill, two hundred strong, but as we cleared the crest,
The night exploded and I felt this small pain in my chest."

"I looked around to get some aid - the only things I found
Were big, deep craters in the earth - bodies on the ground.
I kept on firing at them, sir. I tried to do my best,
But finally sat down with this small pain in my chest."

"I'm grateful, sir", he whispered, as I handed my canteen
And smiled a smile that was, I think, the brightest that I've seen.
"Seems silly that a man my size so full of vim and zest,
Could find himself defeated by a small pain in his chest."

"What would my wife be thinking of her man so strong and grown,
If she could see me sitting here, too weak to stand alone?
Could my mother have imagined, as she held me to her breast,
That I'd be sitting HERE one day with this pain in my chest?"

"Can it be getting dark so soon?" He winced up at the sun.
"It's growing dim and I thought that the day had just begun.
I think, before I travel on, I'll get a little rest ..........
And, quietly, the boy died from that small pain in his chest.

I don't recall what happened then. I think I must have cried;
I put my arms around him and I pulled him to my side
And, as I held him to me, I could feel our wounds were pressed
The large one in my heart against the small one in his chest.






[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 06-21-2000).]
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Please edit so we can vote for it....I adore this one..love all of yours sir but adore this one.    I'll be back to vote!
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2 posted 06-21-2000 01:56 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thanks, deVine one. It was Nan's fault!! (well, why not?) All done!
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Got it! Thank you so much. As you know this one is such a favorite of mine. I'll stuff the ballot box if it doesn't get in!!!!
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yep, stuffing votes in here   I think everything you write could go in the book  
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5 posted 06-21-2000 02:07 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Possible submission?  Probable, more like it!

Sunshine

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Helen Keller ~~~

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6 posted 06-21-2000 02:38 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Very probable 'Deer!!  I want to cry!!  I LOVE this piece!!  Very deep and tender words!!  

(By the way, I came across the repost that X Angel posted of yours!! I look forward to more Free Verse from you)!!!!!!

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7 posted 06-21-2000 02:39 PM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

I would be absolutely honoured Balladeer if by some chance you and I were in the same poetry book. You are awesome! I love your work so much. *smiles*
This was an incredible poem that moved me, made my eyes mist over and left me aching.
I like dat!

~Heather
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8 posted 06-21-2000 02:43 PM       View Profile for FlyHigh   Email FlyHigh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for FlyHigh

Yes, I agree. Moving one. Love it...

Geir Jakobsen

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9 posted 06-21-2000 03:10 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

YES! YES! My favorite!
Thanks
Liz
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Click...
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Exceptionally moving without being morbid or melodramatic. It would bring a tear to the eye of the most hardened, I think.

Pete
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12 posted 06-21-2000 04:19 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

I'm sort of at a loss for words here Baladeer ... truly incredible writing. The flow, the story/concept, the closing line ... they all just wove together so beautifully. I loved this! (click)  

Best wishes,
/Kit
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13 posted 06-21-2000 04:24 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Should I comment or just sit here and cry???

Wonderful piece...thanks for reposting..

chris

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14 posted 06-21-2000 05:08 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Man... Balladeer. There are many of yours that make me smile, a few that make me think (and more than one that's made me scratch my head in wonder) But this... this put a pain in my heart. Strong, powerful, staggering. Almost overwhelming.

Wow.

C.
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15 posted 06-21-2000 05:15 PM       View Profile for Angel   Email Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel

This is so sad. It made me cry. Definitely belongs in the book.

~Susie


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16 posted 06-21-2000 05:32 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

I remember this one very well.
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17 posted 06-21-2000 05:53 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I remember this one very well! Still causes the tearful eye. Geez, you could probably get the whole book to yourself with your work    It's that good!
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One of my favorites of yours, Michael! You got MY vote!

yep... you sure do!
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pure and simple ... you are amazing
jm
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20 posted 06-21-2000 10:24 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Possibilities? I'd say it's an absolute shoe-in! One of my favorites of yours!  

Denise
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dear balladeer,
     this is absolutely beautiful... touching and sweetly sorrowful... you're an exquisite poet sir balladeer, quickly becoming a favorite of mine...

sincerely,
a sad tomato

you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you...
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22 posted 06-22-2000 06:46 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer~
This is such a poignant piece of pure poetry from a heart of gold.
~*Marge*~


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23 posted 06-22-2000 09:14 AM       View Profile for Colin   Email Colin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Colin

I told you I liked this in Open so I won't make yer head swell by saying it again here  

Eric.

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Wonderful work, Balladeer, a real tear jerker, too!

Coriinne
 
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