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X Angel
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0 posted 2000-06-19 08:28 PM


I have now posted three of my favourite poems in the VotW Forum, all oldies, this is my third and final submission to be considered for the book, hope ya'll ain't tired of me yet! *wink*
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she cries into the night
a mournful hollow melody
filling the air with echoes
of a once joyful heart
she sings an unknown language
as she combs her hair of grass
tears fall from her eyes in salt drops
mingling with the ocean's churning froth

once she was a young beauty
graced with life and laughter
now she can only sing a siren song
a sad tune, destined to lure unwary sailors
to their doom, as they drown in her careless smile

her heart was broken
in a selfish gesture
by a lover, so untrue
now her unmerciful soul
will lead no-one home

her death in life so real
she lives not, yet she breathes
called to the sea, to drown her tears
she marks not each day, tho each passes so quickly
she sought the peace of the waves
now it's hers
tho not in death
but life again, sheathed in a scaley skin

no respite for travel weary sailor
can be found upon her shores
for she has no heart left
death inside her, reigns strong and free

she slips among the waves and sea creatures
in silent recognition
tho none speak of her
to speak her name would be death
she acknowledges no creature in her sadness
only the sea weary sailors
lulling them to their eternal sleep
as they drown in her melodic voice

each rise of the sun
day so new, she stares into the blue horizon
as she sits upon weathered stone
amidst the crashing waves and sandy beach
screaming gulls fly overhead
as undrying tears fall into a river of grief
flowing so fast and free
to spread into the sea

in a song of mournful sorrow she waits for the someone
the one she has seen in her dreams
the one who will show her true love again
and free her from this life of death




"Our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything."
--William Shakespeare



© Copyright 2000 Heather Walters - All Rights Reserved
Alwye
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In the space between moments
1 posted 2000-06-19 11:10 PM


Definitely a gorgeous piece of work! I think it would make a wonderful addition to the book!  

*Krista Knutson*

"Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~


"We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
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2 posted 2000-06-20 01:30 AM


Tired of you?!  Puh-leeeeaze!  
This is one of my favorites, girlie...definately gets my vote.

Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31
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3 posted 2000-06-20 07:45 AM


I loved this one!!  I got a tear in my eye, it hit me close!!  
Bridgette


"Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2000-06-20 09:14 AM


amazing imagery in this gem...
wonderful free verse...
shows your versitility as well
and besides whos counting?  
(Ron maybe, since he's gotta read em all) lol
jm

SEA
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5 posted 2000-06-20 09:18 AM


X Angel~ I do remember this one! I loved it then and I still think it is amazing! *vote*   -SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB


BSC
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6 posted 2000-06-20 09:53 AM


X Angel - Wow- This is so beautiful, what images it creates.  Just wonderful.  Bonnie
Colin
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7 posted 2000-06-20 06:39 PM


Heather, I could never get tired of you   I absolutely LOVE this poem, but I think you knew that  

Keep writing!
Eric.

"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

Cerenity
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8 posted 2000-06-21 12:02 PM


Hi X Angel,

I really enjoyed this one, thank you.

Cerenity

wayoutwalt
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9 posted 2000-06-21 01:40 AM


heather this is swell heheh yuh no really it affected me and i liked it yuh
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10 posted 2000-06-21 02:01 AM


That rolling smile can't fool me! This is exquisite in its sadness. Right at the edge of hopeless, but somehow not overbearing. How'd you pull that off? I'm impressed, big-time.

Mike
  

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Sudhir Iyer
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11 posted 2000-06-21 05:39 AM


in a song of mournful sorrow she waits for the someone
the one she has seen in her dreams
the one who will show her true love again
and free her from this life of death
...

very sad and touching this one... very well written...

regards, sudhir


tracie66
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12 posted 2000-06-21 06:09 AM


Sad tale of a beautiful mermaid
such longing, such lonliness and coldness in this...great piece
Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Kit McCallum
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13 posted 2000-06-21 06:44 AM


Your words just brought this whole scene to life so vividly X Angel!  Wonderful!!!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Balladeer
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14 posted 2000-06-21 02:05 PM


I'll get tired of ya when the last shovelful of dirt hits my casket! My vote here  
X Angel
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15 posted 2000-06-24 04:38 PM


Thanks so much everyone for reading, replying, not being tired of me *wink**wink*
I still have to say this is prolly my fave of all 3 of my submissions! (but again I think that's cuz I am a reincarnated Mermaid.....)
*hugs2all*
~Heather

sea_of_okc
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16 posted 2000-06-24 04:54 PM


A captivating story very well woven  
Mike
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17 posted 2000-06-24 06:58 PM


Nicely written.  Enjoyed muchly.
Martie
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18 posted 2000-06-24 08:35 PM


Wonderful, wonderful...
Denise
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19 posted 2000-06-24 08:50 PM


Definitely one of your best, Heather!  

Denise

JP
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20 posted 2000-06-27 01:50 PM


Cha ching!  One vote!



Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
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21 posted 2000-06-29 12:27 PM


"third and final submission"?? you say??

NO WAY!

More please! Vote's in here... your free verse rules, girl!!

and this one is so very fine!

Rose Petal
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22 posted 2000-06-29 12:55 PM


So lovely and descriptive.
AVANTI
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23 posted 2000-06-29 08:56 AM


lovely poem...
well written

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao


Poet deVine
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24 posted 2000-06-30 07:18 PM


Nobody does it better Heather!!!    
Michael
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25 posted 2000-07-05 09:54 AM


Gads - I had to go all the way to the back page to find this - well worth the trip.  You know this is my favorite of yours too...

((HUGS)) and a vote  for ya!

Michael

Poertree
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Posts 1359
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26 posted 2000-07-14 12:14 PM


it seems i missed them all ..lol... yay ..i'm sure i remember this - great story heather ..

p

Nan
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27 posted 2000-07-14 04:34 PM


Hm... where's my name on this here list?? This book can't happen without this little serendipitous mermaid...
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
28 posted 2000-08-03 11:17 AM


Let's see if we can float this one to the top!  
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