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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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~ Maiden to the Sea ~ by poetFemmeFatale Something was pulling her, out toward the sea so she walked toward the cliff, ever angelically... Far below waves were crashing & foaming so white she breathed the air deep & envisioned her flight... Her long dress blew round her & so did her hair out across the dark waters, her gaze frozen there... Something was pulling her, out toward the sea the ocean her lover, beckoned on mystically... She looked o'er her shoulder, her castle now gone the tide took it from her, her dream of so long... She looked at her hands; they were empty & frail and the screams that escaped her - were to no avail... She looked in her heart, full of passion and fire all those who knew her - frowned on her desire... She cried fevered tears - always misunderstood so much love to give, she had tried, never could. Something was pulling her, out toward the sea her face toward the heavens - "So mode it be"... She lifted her arms up; her voice rang out sweet as she sang of the waters, peaceful, ready to greet... this maiden whose soul was too weary to cry... On the cliff, there she sang such a sweet lullaby Her arms raised, were wings of an angel so fair As she flies, if you listen...her song echoes there... "Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies & make a storybook with beautiful pictures for the world to enjoy! -poetFemme |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Yes her song echo's here.... one of my fav's of your's Femme. enchanting to me. Parker |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Wow, this definately has to be one of my favorites of yours!!! I love the story you created, I feel as though I can relate to the "maiden"!! I love poetry that moves me and this does!! "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Beautiful poem. It told me a great story. I loved this one. "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beautiful title and poem I vote a loud 'aye!'  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
pFF~ You are so talented! This is wonderful! This really hits home for me! -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Gorgeous, PFF! I think this would make a glorious addition to the book! *Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~ "We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
pff simply lovely |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful piece, PFF. You have the honor of recieving the great vote of a LoveBug! (honor? Pfff! Oh well, it was worth a try! I TRIED to keep a straight face, ok?) "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
pFF, This is perfection. I know how unyielding I can be with critiques some times, but this just blew me away. I love that the castle was lost to the tide; I love the whole thing. This BETTER get into the book.  Mike |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Great job PFF....you got my vote.. chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Her arms raised, were wings of an angel so fair As she flies, if you listen...her song echoes there... very lovely....a splendid work this regards, sudhir. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Jen your story and imagery were simply breathtaking! I don't believe I've had the pleasure of reading this one before. I'm glad I do now. Mystical and Enchanting! |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Wow, this is just beautiful, greatpoem, great story, that immediately pulls the reader in. Bonnie |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Mystic beauty embalmed with words. Jon |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
PoetFemme you have an absolute talent with words. I sincerely hope you are included in some way in this book because your poetry would be a beautiful addition. Thanks for giving us a little fairy tale trip...(I love fairy tales)  ~Heather |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
love this, I hadn't seen it before...the visions you paint are lovely |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
well you already know i ADORE this enchanting little gem one of your finest weave my poetic princess hope the book is illustrated me |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
dear poetfemmefatale, absolutely beautiful... i can nearly feel the wind on my face as i witness this woman's descent towards the sea... next time i'm on the shore i'll have to listen for her song... sincerely, a sad tomato you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Absolutely beautiful PoetFemme! Breath-taking journey through to the end ... truly wonderful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
As do the others, I like much. Joy |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Poetfemmefatale, Just like watching a movie with great cinematography. I could see and hear the whole thing..Lovely to read. Linda M. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
always loved this one, PFF! It doesn't get more romantic than this! Corinne |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I want to thank all of you for your votes on this one - it holds a very dark but special place in my heart. It's somewhat of a "closure" in my life for a previous chapter, that cast alot of shadows, yet taught me alot about who I really am, and for that, I am thankful. I have far more confidence now that I am on the right road....Thank you all again! "Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies & make a storybook with beautiful pictures for the world to enjoy! -poetFemme |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Something was pulling her, out toward the sea so she walked toward the cliff, ever angelically... Far below waves were crashing & foaming so white she breathed the air deep & envisioned her flight... She looked in her heart, full of passion and fire all those who knew her - frowned on her desire... She cried fevered tears - always misunderstood so much love to give, she had tried, never could. a very haunting yet equally beautiful poem. wonderful < !signature--> A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 06-23-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I love this poem! |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
This is beautiful! |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Very beautiful poem A lovely addition it would be Rich |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
A pleasure to vote for this poem. An excellent example of your wonderful writing talent. (hey Razorback) Back to the top of the pack! A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
They don't get much better than this. You have my enthusiastic vote! fh |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
very beautiful Gennifer gets my vote as well Rex |
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