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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Even if this gets nowhere near the book, I just wanted to share it again, in hopes people would read it.  I really like this one.Mike -i am goodbye- I am sunlight. I am rain. I am living. I am pain. I am mud-colored stones in a brook, a long winding passage in a must-read book, a turret of your castled rook, a long lustful backward goodbye look. I am nature. I am love. I am a woman. I am a dove. I am a man. I am a horse. I am an insect. I am divorce. I am sweetness. I am your tongue. I am your eyes. I am all wrong. I am all right. I am the night. I am a flashlight With the batteries almost gone. I am the long cords in your arms. I am what you say when it can only end in harm, Imploding collapse, a broken calm, Middle finger all that's left of your palm, Birds suddenly singing deathly psalms, No longer just your only two's song. I am love. I am hate. I am goodbye. I am too late. I am the rope from which you pretend to hang. I am the words still sharp as fangs. Puncture wounds and so-long swoons, Nights alone watching the arc of the moon. I am the diminished glow on your face. I am the final night of her lingerie lace. I am the first sun pouring through the blinds When nothing but nothing is left on your mind. I am your friends trying to help you through. I am the loneliness that ferments and stews. I am her, I am you. Tell me what you want to do. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
a long lustful backward goodbye look. I am nature. I am love. I am a woman. I am a dove. I am a man. I am a horse. I am an insect. I am divorce. I am sweetness. I am your tongue. I am your eyes. I am all wrong. I am all right. I am the night. I am a flashlight With the batteries almost gone. I am the long cords in your arms. I am what you say when it can only end in harm, Imploding collapse, a broken calm, Middle finger all that's left of your palm, ---------------- I am the diminished glow on your face. I am the final night of her lingerie lace. I am the first sun pouring through the blinds When nothing but nothing is left on your mind. I am your friends trying to help you through. I am the loneliness that ferments and stews. I am her, I am you. Tell me what you want to do. -------------------- butterfly slippers wants you to keep writing  and she is in heaven ... 2 forums to read your words in the same night butterfly bliss *smile* this is one of my favs of yours ... its so MIKE...and that i like later-I-am-gator me-gator |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
This is great - glad I got to read it. Truly worthy of a poetry book ~netswan |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I must have missed this before Mike, and I'm truly glad you posted it here. The format is wonderful and flows beautifully with your sentiments in this verse ... very well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
This is fantastic! I haven't read it before, I'm glad I got to this morning! -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
oooh I liked the idea of this one. And some of your lines! WOW! H |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
well if one more vote helps here's mine I love this |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
I am liking this one The flashlight with the batteries almost gone got a giggle.Keep up the good work, Eric |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Janet, Always glad to make you smile. And "butterfly bliss" is cute. netswan, Thanks. That reply made me feel good aaaall over. Kit, Thanks for reading, and you enjoyed. SEA, Was it like waking from a long sleep? J/k. I'm glad you got a chance to read it, and thanks for your kind reply. Xangel, Merci. Corazon, Always glad to see you poke your head up and say hi every once in a while. Hi back. Eric, Okay, how old are you? You're not supposed to giggle, you weirdo! Mike |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sigh. Okay. I admit it. Avoided this one because it hurt... and that is now exactly why I'm voting for it...sighs....ya just gotta get me, coming and going, doncha? loves ya... |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
Bsquirrel, You beaufitully addresses a very sad and painful subject-yet did it in a very thought provoking way- I like it, you've got my vote! David |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Heart here is all in a flutter...loved it Mike...encore |
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gothicmoth Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 89 |
I...am...speechless. Wow. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, everyone. I'm glad you enjoyed, and appreciate my writing. And s'en, sometimes the things that hurt us are the best things for us.Notice I said sometimes. Later, all. Mike |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i'm crying literally this is awesome! this is published in my memory... it's wonderful! in a word... this is poetry... thank you |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Doreen, (hug) and thanks. Mike |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
What a terrific poem from beginning to end. Bonnie |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
This is great!  I am voting! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike, can I surrender again? You are a wonderful writer! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you everyone. And Martie: Mike |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Jeez, I'm flying around here because I haven't been able to be around lately and I am REALLY glad I didn't miss this one. Excellent writing, Mike |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I can imagine a Shakespeare bust flying around, and it's very surreal. Thanks, Bal(ladeer). I appreciate it.Mike |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I didn't have the pleasure before, I'm glad I got it now! This was great writing |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, WhtDove. Mike |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Mike, I am very glad I read this, and I hope it does get in to the book, thanks for posting it again. Cerenity |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Cerenity, Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and also, thanks for saving it from obscurity! Mike |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
This old thing again? M. |
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