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Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2000-09-22 01:43 PM



A little different approach for the challenge "If I were to need you"  Just felt this is the way I would "need" someone....


Sometimes when
No other words
Need to be spoken

When I fall short
Of who I am
Suppose to be

When life is on
My shoulders

And the nights
Seem to be
Long

When I feel
I cannot do
Anything right

And I fumble
My words

I want you
To know

That

I Need You

© Copyright 2000 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-09-22 01:49 PM


And what a lovely twist it is also.  Wonderfully penned.
Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
2 posted 2000-09-22 04:11 PM


Hi Greeneyes,
Well done, and a very nice way to say "I need you".

Bill

Jenn E
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589
Kelowna, BC, Canada
3 posted 2000-09-22 04:14 PM


This was a great twist. I like the format as well as the message.  
Jenn E

Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704
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4 posted 2000-09-22 04:20 PM


Ms Ojos Verdi -
You have not lost your touch - and now you added a new dimension  - this is exceptional

Larry C
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5 posted 2002-03-12 02:44 PM


Lauren,
Did I ever tell you that I like being needed! Awesome write.

Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
6 posted 2002-07-08 05:47 PM


ahh..yes..and we must remember to need them when things are going well also. Searching through the archives. Miss you 'round here, Lady.

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
7 posted 2003-01-13 02:55 AM


*smile* love this
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