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Michael
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0 posted 2000-09-22 10:30 AM


THE EYES


I feel them on me everywhere,
Yet burn an incessant desire
To run as fast as Time would dare
This pitted soul to rise and sire
From all the Darkness around me -
From voices past and shadows, grim -
A likeness to ‘er confound me,
That I should not be more like Him!

Yet still they follow - follow me
To peel this soul from rotting skin...
...As if, per chance, they cannot see
The prices I've paid for "their" sin;
This cross I've borne to no witness,
The vestige of a man, once proud.
...As if self-declared unfitness,
Would proffer me a martyr's shroud.

But, oh, the woe they yet imbue
Upon me with indolent stare,
To suffer me what they hold true
That I should wince, thus prove them fair
And just, their accusation firm.
No sovereign penance save the name
Nor bleed this guilt, I'll serve my term,
If mere reflection of their shame.

Michael Anderson



[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 09-23-2000).]

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Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-09-22 10:34 AM


Wow Michael....this is an excellent piece with much emotion and an onslaught of power.  Loved the last two stanzas especially.

Yet still they follow - follow me
To peel this soul from rotting skin...
...As if, per chance, they cannot see
The prices I've paid for "their" sin;
This cross I've beared to no witness,
The vestige of a man, once proud.
...As if self-declared unfitness,
Would proffer me a martyr's shroud.

But, oh, the woe they yet imbue
Upon me with indolent stare,
To suffer me what they hold true
That I should wince, thus prove them fair
And just, their accusation firm.
No sovereign penance save the name
Nor bleed this guilt, I'll serve my term,
If mere reflection of their shame.

Michael Anderson


Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-09-22 10:46 AM


From all the Darkness around me -
From voices past and shadows, grim -
A likeness to ‘er confound me,
That I should not be more like Him!

Yet still they follow - follow me
To peel this soul from rotting skin...
...As if, per chance, they cannot see
The prices I've paid for "their" sin;
This cross I've beared to no witness,
The vestige of a man, once proud.
...As if self-declared unfitness,
Would proffer me a martyr's shroud.
===================
To suffer me what they hold true
That I should wince, thus prove them fair
And just, their accusation firm.
No sovereign penance save the name
Nor bleed this guilt, I'll serve my term,
If mere reflection of their shame.
====================

this is Michael poetry at its purest and finest...
i have said this before...and it still holds true ...
NO ONE else bleeds poetically like this..
no one else could ...
and you already know how deep the emotions in this one cuts and touches me...
once again in ways only your words do
give it back to them M, ...
it was their pain and shame in the first place...
take care gifted poet
jm

Sunshine
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3 posted 2000-09-22 10:47 AM


doubly blessed with two prolific poets...Michael, so glad to see you back...Mark, great reply...
Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
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4 posted 2000-09-22 01:07 PM


Hi Michael,

SO much enjoyed this very powerful peice of art work, boy you can write, I love the words you use, awesome exsample to the poetry world my friend.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)


Mike
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since 1999-06-19
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5 posted 2000-09-22 01:27 PM


Excellent poetry.
Trew
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since 2000-06-10
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6 posted 2000-09-22 01:28 PM


A true work of art, Michael.
Displaying full emotion and making this reader feel it deep inside, you have penned a tiumph.  Wonderful.

Trev.

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7 posted 2000-09-23 03:09 PM


since nobody said it..."The Eyes" have it!
a deliciously decadent feast of words!  

Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15
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8 posted 2000-09-24 01:43 AM


You express your darkness so eloquently, my love ... beautifully and hauntingly written.

"The vestige of a man, once proud.
...As if self-declared unfitness,
Would proffer me a martyr's shroud
"

Love you

--Me



YOUR LIFE IS A TEST

It is only a test ...

If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions!


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