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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
Write me of love, you asked, as the gums wavered in the breeze, dropping leaves burnt brown and gold, into the flowing waters at our feet. So I wrote, painting emotion with broad brush strokes, dipping my pen in colors red, colors blue, painting words, for me and you, I wrote of love, love lost, lovers cost, I wrote and the words shimmered with Inner Light, I wrote and the words bled pain and blight, as every love is want to do, as has the love, of me and you. Write me of sadness, you asked, as the single falcon, winged above us, a plaintive call, all that marked his passing, solitary. So I wrote, my words flowing across the page, dripping over the edges, splashing upon us, I wrote of alone, of need and desire, of loss and abject despair, it was all there, all the soft tears I have cried, all the times the sages lied, the words cried themselves off my page, and flowed into the clear waters at our feet. Write me of hope, you asked, as the sister moon, glowed in your eyes, hiding the times, you cried for me, to me, about me. So I wrote, the words backlit with shades of green, flickering as an insect wing, casting iridescent hue on the page, I wrote of age, young and old, love made bold, I wrote of chances taken, not forsaken this time, my words set fire to the page, and tendrils licked along my fingers, I wrote hope for us. Write me of what's to come, you asked, as the wind placed her breath on you, making your hair flare and dare to be free around you. So I wrote, but the page stays bare, many times I've written lines, but the futures not mine, to write. |
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
How did this ever get by without a single comment? as the sister moon, glowed in your eyes ... So I wrote, the words backlit with shades of green, flickering as an insect wing, casting iridescent hue on the page ... my words set fire to the page, and tendrils licked along my fingers, ... as the wind placed her breath on you, making your hair flare and dare to be free around you ... There are some really beautiful lines here. An interesting, delightful read. ~ megan |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Fool, welcome back, I've seen some of your stuff on the older passions but nothing for a while and now this, magically written post. *HuGS* Be well Kethry. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nice to see you again, fool... and of course, you're not.... This is a very good piece of work, my friend - I particularly like the visage of the "tears crying themselves off the page"... though it's difficult to select a favorite line from this poem... Do stick around awhile - Nice job!!...  |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
My O MY O My...if another word were never written... you have said so much in just this one poem... it will be a favorite of mine now to treasure thanks for sharing it ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Oh wow! This poem is tremendous!! In fact, it left such an impression on me, I am left totally speechless... I wish I could eloquently express, but I can't! Absolutely terrific!!!!  I'll have to store this in memory-bank as one of my favourites... thanks! ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very good indeed! the words color and fill my imagination to the brim. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow can you write...if the future were yours to write, I would want to share it, it would be beautiful |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
grandiloquent~ Thankyou kindly,Im so glad you enjoyed the poem *smile*. Kethry~Hiya Keth *waving*,I saw a couple of your pieces floating around,you are writing very well at the moment I must say .Nan~fool sweeps a low bow before the glittering beauty of the fair lady Nan *cheeky grin*.Hello my sweet,true,it has been a while since I travelled these halls,thankyou so much for the welcome back. MMoonchild~*smile*,thankyou Maureen,I very much enjoyed writing this one,Im glad you like it. taramw~ My thanks tara,hopefully if you keep it,I will be able to ask you for a copy of it when I lose it *laughing*. Rosebud1229~ Thankyou Rosebud *smile* Corazon~thankyou for writing such a beautiful response,it really made me smile. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This was so well written........I am not even sure what to say here except EXCEPTIONAL WORK!!!! This was a pleasure to read.........and I don't think you would have any trouble writing the future........ Jenn E |
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