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Open Poetry #9

warm snow was melting...

Master
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since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-09-21 09:13 PM

That night there was a full eclipse
Warm snow was melting on her lips
A scent of spring was in the air
He said, “let’s go,” she asked him, “where?”
They slowly wandered with no purpose
Warm snow was melting on the surface
He tightly held her shaking hand
He said, “let’s kiss,” she asked him, “when?”
Their lips have touched and frozen still
Warm snow was melting on a hill
Heart to a heart, eye to an eye
He begged, “again!” she asked him, “why?”
There was no purpose in it all
Warm snow has melted in his soul
In her, the snow turned into ice
And she was melting in his eyes

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http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

1 posted 2000-09-21 09:40 PM

Terrific last three lines, Master and the way you constructed the lines with her questions in them was brilliant. The thoughts expressed were great.....hell, I just like the entire poem!

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