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If I Were Going To Need You [Temptress' Challenge]
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If I Were Going To Need You [Temptress' Challenge] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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If I Were Going To Need You …and if ever were to come you would hear it in my voice in a stringed violin’s hum if ever were to materialize before your eyes I would fall into them and realize I’d come home… if I were going to need you… and if I were going to need you but couldn’t start the trip to find you here then I would find you, there… If I were going to need you... then listen for the violin… 21 September, 2000 ©Karilea Rilling Jungel [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 09-21-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
If the "if's" become the "when's" then the "when's" shall answer the "if's". Then the "there's" shall also live in the "here's" and the "there's" will simply be a memory. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sunshine, when I first read of this challenge I was reminded of the song "if ever I could leave you" but now after reading your poem I'm reminded of "climb every mountain". See this is what your poem did to me it changed the song in my head. Thanks for posting such an inspiring piece.  Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
if ever were to materialize before your eyes I would fall into them and realize I’d come home… Love this thought, Sunshine... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This was a challenge well met in my eyes. Lots of thoughts came with this while reading. Thanks for participating.  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
More like a choir of violins. . . This is excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mark, was that a riddle?... Kethry, I've been known to touch a few folk, but I never knew I changed a song in their mind in mid-chorus...LOL...loved the telling, thanks for the comment... Martie, always look forward to your comments... Temptress, there were many fine responses to your challenge...and I'm glad you had time to read mine...thanks... Sven, a choir?  ...thanks! |
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