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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Asleep I dream of her Praying she will be there Laying in wait for my presence Just her Sweet notes Music of love Love's melody playing A classic concerto for two Us two Dreaming Rematch for us Wonder if there'll be one Praying I'll hear her speaking my name A call I once Was my own man Control: I have lost it All that I am is her. My Mind I've lost ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Bravo Wilfred! What a beautiful read ... perfection ... with such wonderful thoughts of falling helplessly and happily out of control. Excellent writing!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
ahhhh that out of control feeling, know it all too well..... nicely done my friend always~ Greeneyes~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Leading with the heart instead of the mind is a GOOD thing...no second guessing and no disecting it...just live it...show it...love it...love her... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Writing he speaks his heart listen to it sing now messages of love song's sweet tease call him Beautifully done too! [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 09-21-2000).] |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Kit- THank you - Like a water slide - Hope it never ends Green Eyes - when you're there - grab that brass ring - you never know how many times 'round you'll go ~G~ thanks Mark- I do - thanks Martie- cinquain A verse response such sweet words that I read a reply that deserves no less thank you |
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nando Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 87Vaxjo, Smaland, Sweden |
Wilfred This is a beautiful poem...You are obviously a lucka man that knows love that strong...I salute you. -nando- Ask me how to live your life, and this to you I´ll say: make your choises true and wise, so that when tomorrow will arise, you´ll smile at yesterday... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Nando- Although the future is as uncertain as it ever has been - I feel extremely lucky Thank you ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wilfred, *Sigh*Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Kethry- How do I respond to *Sigh*Thank you Bill |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mr. Yeats...how do you do... when you do so well... liked the words and the format... can't you tell? {~,^} Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Karilea - I feel certain the love I'm feeling - you will feel - and may even remember feeling - - It is the source of my inspiration and my words. Thank you ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
I used to fight the feeling. Now, much like you have written, I am unable and unwilling to fight it any longer. Surrendered to love and am all the better for it! Just a wonderful poem, Wilfred. Directly to the soul... Trev. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Trew- you got it right - best way to go -win or lose - the feelings are so much more intense. what you pay if you lose is always outweighed by what you have while you're winning Thanks |
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