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JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2000-09-20 06:12 PM


Seven Words

Sweetheart
my feelings are growing for you
and I hope your feelings are growing too.
You have my Love and you have my heart
and I sincerely hope we will never part.
Reassure me if you can
because I really want to be your man.
I could not bear it if you said go away.
I will be eternally sad if you don't stay.
So these seven words I offer to you today.
"I Love you so never go away."

I.............hope you will
Love.....me with all your heart.
You.......mean the world to me
So..........I hope and pray nothing keeps us apart.
Never....forget that if you stay or choose to
go..........away, I Love the way you stole my heart
away...

Please take my Love and take my heart
and may these seven words
bond us closer together
never to part..

Jameslee@September20,2000
TobeautifulMina





[This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 09-20-2000).]

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juliet_2u
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since 2000-07-23
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North Carolina
1 posted 2000-09-20 06:24 PM


Awww James how could she resist that?... Very beautiful work.
Juls

Dee
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since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia
2 posted 2000-09-20 07:12 PM


James, this is so sweet. The way you have written it is wonderful. I have never seen a poem written that way before. (maybe I just don't get out much)
Dee

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2000-09-20 07:19 PM


Jamming Jame's style I do believe it should be called.  Wonderful read sir and I would say you chances are very good in keeping her if you continue to write your heart.
jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
4 posted 2000-09-20 07:33 PM


Well, if she doesn't, let me know, I know a number that WILL!  But, I'm sure you've caught that butterfly my friend

jwesley

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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Lansing, MI USA
5 posted 2000-09-20 08:35 PM


James,

Awww, what a sweet plea my friend!!!  I am sure she cannot resist this one.  It is beautiful beyond a doubt!!  I hope she feels the same.  

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Paula Finn
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missouri
6 posted 2000-09-20 10:16 PM


James...how wonderful my friend...you KNOW my thoughts on this...simply beautiful
JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2000-09-21 06:43 AM


Thank you Juliet, Dee, Mark, JWesley, Lone Wolf, and Paula for the wonderful remarks...
JWesley my heart felt joy when I read you think I have caught this butterfly...I am starting to believe she wants to be caught.
Paula I have shared some wonderful moments with Mina and hope to share many more...I told her on the phone today that I think I am falling in Love with her...she said that is good...I told her only if she feels the same way... a smile is on my face...James

Marsha
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8 posted 2000-09-21 06:56 AM


James I too think you've caught this butterfly. Beautifully writen as always, and such a delightful read and one of your best I think. Well done.  



[This message has been edited by Marsha (edited 09-22-2000).]

Beth
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WA, Australia
9 posted 2000-09-22 02:34 AM


~This is gorgeous. I loved it!!~

~Cherie~

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
10 posted 2000-09-23 12:18 PM


Thank you Marsha and Beth...I appreciate your nice comments...James
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