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grandiloquent
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0 posted 09-20-2000 03:46 AM       View Profile for grandiloquent   Email grandiloquent   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit grandiloquent's Home Page   View IP for grandiloquent


          Afterlust
          daybreak hinting around the skylight
          CDs blasting serene melodies
          feeling giddy in the Morningafter
          as the cold arranges what I think
          cozy-shimmy down in my four-poster
          empty now except for me
          dozy with your taste in my mouth
          & the exquisite commotion that you leave
          shadowprints my body over, waning warm spots in my bed
          must leave the covers the way they tangled
          when, with watch advice, you shyly fled
          mind slipping easy with the flu of you
          fever burning up my eyes and lips and fingertips
          dizzy stars around my head --
          me sinking in my stupid grin
          vain attempts to sleep to dream about you
          as I giggle and push the pillow in


© Copyright 2000 Megan - All Rights Reserved
Wilfred Yeats
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1 posted 09-20-2000 10:45 AM       View Profile for Wilfred Yeats   Email Wilfred Yeats   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Wilfred Yeats's Home Page   View IP for Wilfred Yeats

I am speechless with admiration of your work
(really)


~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning.

~ Billy Wilder
SpitFire
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2 posted 09-20-2000 12:24 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Ooh Yeah,...Right on! I like this style of writing,...this sort of bare and out there and totally captivating way about it. You word so well a tale of your time,...your poetic verses speak out. Well, well written piece here,...on my way to look for more of you. Take it easy now. *Peace.
Kit McCallum
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3 posted 09-20-2000 12:30 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Excellent Grandiloquent! Such a smooth read from thought to wonderful thought ... I could picture this scene perfectly as she flitted about in afterglow, wonderful!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
doreen peri
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4 posted 09-20-2000 12:38 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

I love it!



great lines in here......    

~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~

Martie
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5 posted 09-20-2000 01:54 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

grandiloquent--the way you write is so sure and naturally alluring...made me smile...Beautifully done!
Kethry
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grandiloquent,
it was grand and it was eloquent, with vivid imagery to boot. I loved it
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-
grandiloquent
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7 posted 09-26-2000 07:11 PM       View Profile for grandiloquent   Email grandiloquent   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit grandiloquent's Home Page   View IP for grandiloquent


Billy,
you keep me grounded when silly fear/impatience wind into my doubts. Thank you for your persistance and generous compliments.

SpitFire,
*grins* Well, I guess that means you liked it   And you're going to do further research? woohoo!

Kit,
Thank You. Hmm, sounds like it would've been a lovely experience to have sorted through your mind as you read this. With that sort of mind's eye, I'd love to see your interpretation of a similiar scenario...
do you have anything posted I can seek out?

doreen,
Word from you is such high praise... gollygoshgeesthanks *blushes*

Martie,
Wow, this went all the way to your lips?  
I'll take that as a compliment. Thank you for reading!

Kethry,
I can hardly come up with a reply quite so flattering and concise as yours... A few timid words of gratitude: I'm so glad you enjoyed it; thank you for taking the time to let me know you did.

p.s. I don't know that I would call anything I've ever written grand or eloquent, but, heavens, you made my day by saying so!

~megan
JSage
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8 posted 09-27-2000 02:04 PM       View Profile for JSage   Email JSage   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JSage's Home Page   View IP for JSage

I am in love with this poem.  It is simply beautiful!  The style is wonderful... very unique.  I can't wait to read more of your work.

-Jes
TexUS
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9 posted 08-07-2004 04:24 PM       View Profile for TexUS   Email TexUS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TexUS

Really great-Loved the images portayed here...

 
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