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A sacred vow ( special reason for this) For Dawn (pout)
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A sacred vow ( special reason for this) For Dawn (pout) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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HI everyone, well I feel kind of silly putting down my pen and taking a poetic holiday only to pick it up again and write a poem. I am still on a break and this is strictly a once off. This poem is a special dedication to someone I love dearly but am afraid I may now lose due to circumstances in her life that I am powerless to help with. The words just flowed out today. Thanks in advance for understanding. For my sweet angel who is in my thoughts always. ======================= A sacred vow In awakenings of long sedated senses you are projected upon the iris, an azure princess set within deepest shade. I have dragged this body of mine through the lonely exile, now with you held here I may never walk alone. The despondent covers that held me under thumb, kept me locked with key crumbles to virgin snow; in that first glance without the bearings and melancholy I was found and in the same emotion lost in you. Through distances caresses of faint skin, connections are crafted in the trance of ghost dance to inner psyche. In shaman honesty layers of defence shed to bright transparency I saw the very centre of you reflected in the very core of me. Apple eye apple valentine, You are all to me. I only fail to validate your delicate intricacies to my confidants looking on solely through my obscure narrative, no debate or carbon test can pierce or dissect the ambrosial wash that baptises me. They have not heard your complex tender talk equal in euphoria and heart ache, or drifted into insomniac nights following dawn to your feet. In that light you are an enigma, the feared quandary but let them shudder and pray for my fragile self, For you are the Immaculate Vision, that pains their weak eyes to see, only I vow never to look away. < !signature--> The softest thing in the world Will overcome the hardest.Non-being can enter where there is no space". Taoist saying [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 09-20-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Brian, if we only get you for a moment, how good of you to make it so special... well done, sir! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"no debate or carbon test can pierce or dissect the ambrosial wash that baptises me." Magnificent wording Brian ... what a beautiful piece, really wonderfully crafted!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely, Brian. Ya just can't quantify or qualify love! Corinne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I was found and in the same emotion lost in you. ==================== Bri...in the past... you have written some of the most deep and intellectual poems I have ever read...used words that I had not a clue what they meant... wrote with metaphors that i could not decode Those 11 words above... are some of the most profound you've ever wrote... You KNOW...I Should have that tattooed on my forehead  >>I saw the very centre of you reflected in the very core of me. Apple eye apple valentine, You are all to me.<< Ive read this poem several times now... each time seeing another layer...another emotional level reached... I think this is one of the best you've written...it is one of my top 5 favs of yours... I just wish you didnt have to go thru the pain that comes from being inspired this way... but oh how it does inspire us... (youknowthatIknow)... I'll be in touch soon take care eve-a-gator |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
brian--you always manage to touch my heart every time you write...especially now! |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Brian, Welcome back.. if only for a moment. I'm glad you came back to post this incredable poem.. "... I saw the very centre of you reflected in the very core of me. Apple eye apple valentine, You are all to me...." I love those lines.. I find them so honest and so beautiful.. thank you again for sharing rp25 |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
For whatever reason you came back, I'm glad you did. Exceptional writing, Brian.... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I know that I have been cryptic in my poems when it comes to dedications but now things have happened that will be drawing me away from the site, personal affairs that need my time and focus and that will hopefully resolve themselves for the best. I would like to thank Passions (Ron and all the poets) for their support and friendship and I would like to dedicate this poem to Dawn (pout) who I will love always. I really do not wish to go into details, thank you. To Sunshine, Kit, Corinne, Jan, Martie, RP25 and Balladeer thank you for your wonderful comments and support. < !signature--> My view stretches out from the fence to the wall No words could explain, no actions determine Just watching the trees and the leaves as they fall:Joy division [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 09-20-2000).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Hey Brian, Can I mark your essays? A+ for internal congruence and poetic masterpiece. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Brian, sometimes a holiday is not what we need. Sometimes we need the ear and shoulder of a friend. Going by the replies here, you have the latter. Beautifully written. I hope everything works out for you. Dee |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I too had a sweet angel...I know the special feelings that can grow inside your heart...lovely writing...James |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
oh sweet boy, i dont think i could love anything or anyone more than i love you. and to have you share this beautiful vow in front of our poetic friends has lifted my spirits more than you could know. and in the end, we will get exactly what we are destined for...i promise. with all that i am.. given yo you, ~Dawn< !signature--> "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos [This message has been edited by poutprincess (edited 09-21-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So how could anyone not let a you shine when you do it so well from your heart. Rules are made to be broken when it comes out of love and in doing so you have not only honored her...you have graced us with another special moment with you. I bow to you and applaud your soul. |
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