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Wesley the Blue
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Forest Lake, MN, USA

0 posted 2000-09-18 01:06 PM



Alright, this one has been through the spin cycle in CA (critical analysis) and this is, as far as the forseable future is concerned, the last revision.  Without further ado, the poem.

Across the watery blue expanse I gaze
At far distant shores
All shrouded in misty haze
Wonder what the future has in store

Lake Superior mirrors me
Deep in it’s foggy collection
Sometimes in it I can see
My emotional reflection

Storms are raging deep inside
With cataclysmic force, they destroy
Can’t be running, no where to hide
Tossed like a kid’s unwanted toy

That water is bitter cold
Like the tears running down my face
These feelings sit and mold
In my darkened, secret place

Far away from those who care
Everything locked up inside
Around here, I don’t dare
Let it out, put the walls aside

Like a bird whose wings have been plucked
I try to keep aloft in the air of existence
But right to the ground I get sucked
Victim of life’s insistence

Here I am imprisoned
But not against my will
More painful than we envisioned
Feeling the love that we share still

We chose to go these separate ways
To go out to the world and learn
With promises of love always
Oh, how I do so for her yearn

I struggle towards my goal
Tempest contained within
The thunder pains role
My love lies Dort Hin

Forced to travel the muddy ground
I crawl my way on
Tethered but forward bound
Hope for me is not yet gone

I know that somewhere
Across this infernal inland see
She lies awake and dreams me near
As it is the way with me

I creep through the fields of time
Each step that brings me closer
A wisecrack or cynic rhyme
Agitation inside, wilder

Patience is the key
Remember the times we’ve had
Looking to what might yet be
Trying not to be so sad

Hand over fist I climb
Up the cliffs of forever
Covered in dirt and grime
I will give up never

She beckons in the distance
Lends me the strength to fight
Encouraging my persistence
As I struggle with all my might

She reaches out and pulls me in
Strong shelter from the rain
Warms me with her supple skin
And takes away the pain

I awake within her folds
The storm just a nightmare
Light all the future holds
Life’s joys without care

A brief stay in paradise
Then I must go away
The time we had was more than nice
Ill return another day

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Wow! What a journey you've laid out here, Der! Really enjoyed reading through it. Nice ending.
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