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snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
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0 posted 2000-09-17 10:33 PM


If you'd only listen,
I'd tell you
Not to worry,
Because,
From here,
The view
Is truly pleasing.
Your face
And all of its expressions--
Altogether lovely.
Don't be consumed
By other opinions;
To me,
You are paradise.
When you kiss me,
I am taken far away
From this wretched place,
So occupied with
Its materialistic concerns.
If you'd just give me a chance,
I'd show you
What our world would be
Without the problems
Accompanying superficial worries.
Believe me, Love,
You are
The unparalleled find
In their search for perfection.



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ggrn3
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since 2000-08-17
Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.
1 posted 2000-09-17 10:44 PM


Snowpants

  This was an incredible poem. I liked it and I'm looking forward to seeing many more.
  I did not get to see your opening post, but I will try to go back and read it also.
  Welcome to passions.

Garfield

BirdeeB
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 106
USA
2 posted 2000-09-17 10:59 PM


Snowpants,
Thank you so much.
You poem is awesome too, I love it. This world is very materlistic, sometimes its hard to stand, Write on
BirdeeB

"So don't judge me by my failures, only by my dreams" SR71

snowpants
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3 posted 2000-09-17 11:06 PM


Thank you ggrn3 and BirdeeB for the compliments!

ggrn3, fyi, my first post was 'Falling Alone,' posted on 9/16.  Thanks for the interest!!  

sp

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