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Out of Giving

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Balladeer
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0 posted 09-17-2000 01:02 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

You said you wanted happiness,
A thought that sounded great.
You said you needed peace of mind
I offered you a plate.
You said you wanted me around.
I showed you how to make it.
I gave the opportunity
How come you didn't take it?

You know the things I need to have.
My life's an open door
And, in return I'd give and give,
And then I'd give some more.

But, either I am very dumb
Or you're not very smart.
While I spent my time giving,
You were taking me apart.

You never tried to understand
What I was all about
And now, instead of giving,
I have simply given out.

Frustration makes my muscles ache
But life is for the living.
How sad you finally came to take
When I was out of giving.



Have you ever imagined a world with no hypothetical situations?

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 09-17-2000).]
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1 posted 09-17-2000 01:18 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Geez, I just got caught crying at the computer again...thanks alot, B'd...this --almost immediately after laughing til I cried with Marge...

you wrote too well of a sad, sad, situation.
Although it will look cute on my refrigerator...smiles and thanks, and you think they'll believe it's hormones?
(I'm not crazy--I'M NOT--I was just reading POETRY...)----SURE LADY, SURE.  HUGS.
snowpants
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2 posted 09-17-2000 01:22 AM       View Profile for snowpants   Email snowpants   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit snowpants's Home Page   View IP for snowpants

Wow!  That's great!  A few years ago, I wrote a poem about the same thing, but, it wasn't quite as good as yours!  
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 09-17-2000 01:43 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer~
There are givers and takers in this big ole world ...
*Hugs* iffen ya' need 'em ...
and bigger *HUGS* iffen ya' don't !
Now what kind of a win-win situation is that ?

I like hypothetical situations !
They're so much easier to solve.

Love ya'
~*Marge*~




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Janet Marie
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4 posted 09-17-2000 01:45 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

some women are just blind  
they dont know when they have the best
some women like to play games
and put love to the test

Its not you who is "dumb"
its her that is the fool
one day she will realize ...
she blew her chance...cause you just RULE
(and you write so dang COOL)

this is just so YOU ...
and thats a VERY GOOD thing
touching deep with this one sweet deer
jm
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5 posted 09-17-2000 03:13 AM       View Profile for grandiloquent   Email grandiloquent   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit grandiloquent's Home Page   View IP for grandiloquent

Oh, how I can relate. I hope this is a glance-to-the-past poem instead of a present situation. In the latter case, on the bright side, it seems you have a truckload of supporting friends who recognize you for what you are (not to mention will suffocate you with hugs in these types of situations). Forget the people who use, abuse, and/or suck the life and love out of you; everyone is worth more than that.


p.s. excellently titled.
tracie66
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6 posted 09-17-2000 03:27 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Oh Bal
I see a sad face but a huge heart
I somehow think that you will find the strength to get through this.
sending warm wishes and a BIG HUG your way
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Beth
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7 posted 09-17-2000 04:01 AM       View Profile for Beth   Email Beth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beth

~This is very sad...But it looks like you gained insight..And that's a great thing....Thanks for sharing!!~

~Cherie~
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8 posted 09-17-2000 04:24 AM       View Profile for cathybohannan   Email cathybohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cathybohannan

You have a great gift of how to put just the
right words down to express how you feel.

Cathy
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9 posted 09-17-2000 06:20 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Bal: Will you please quit reading my mind all the time  

HUSG

"If you always do what you've always done
You'll always be where you are right now."

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10 posted 09-17-2000 08:07 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
I think your real name is Quick Draw McGraw.
I was working on a poem along the same lines
I'll post it as soon as I finish. As always An excellent rendition of the subject matter.
ENJOYED.
doreen peri
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11 posted 09-17-2000 09:08 AM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

quote:
You never tried to understand
What I was all about
And now, instead of giving,
I have simply given out.


boy, do i know this feeling all too well!!! ...reminds me of my first marriage... oh, and my second marriage... LOL... aw hell, i give up!   hehe... *wink* thanks for posting this. as always, your poetry is wonderful!  
ddgoose
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12 posted 09-17-2000 09:33 AM       View Profile for ddgoose   Email ddgoose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ddgoose

Balladeer

You certainly have quite a few of us who can relate to your situation.  Remember - there is someone special out there who will love you for what you are.  Join the club of "lookers annonymous".  I like the comment of "Quick Draw McGraw" too.  Just in case you need a big hug, I am sending one your way.  

                    didi
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13 posted 09-17-2000 09:58 AM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

This poem is right up my alley (are you sure you're in the right forum?)  
I'm a giver by nature, the words flowed and were so insightful. People can sometimes suck the life right out of you, once they learn you are that type of person, they come back for more. I had a friend once, a nice girl who pretty much used me for her "feeling good drive up window" a fast food restaurant type of friendship, where she drove off and I was left holding the change.
I loved this one, it really spoke to me, but then all of yours do, that's why your filling up my library!!!


Kathleen

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14 posted 09-17-2000 10:12 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

Balladeer,

this is one of the more serious poems you've written and I really like it. You are so good at humorous writing. I knew there had to be a serious side of you. Thank you for sharing it, though the poem hit hard as to my relationship now, me being the one it's directed towards. I don't need much giving. Too much is annoying. I've been on my own for five years...and it's hard to get used to someone there, giving all the time.

But then the way you wrote this poem makes me appreciate his giving a little more than I have, knowing it might not be there when I need it.
WhtDove
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15 posted 09-17-2000 10:19 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Geez this one brought tears to my eyes. It touches a little too deep!
For things that bring back memories, and I guess not all resolved.

Damn Deer you have a way with your words!
Martie
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Balladeer--Yup, I been there too...you see life situations with such empathy and write with such great talent...I hope this is a little piece of fiction for you or something from the past, whatever...you get a hug anyway...just cause you're so deer.
Paula Finn
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17 posted 09-17-2000 11:24 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

Oh how this stung...its always so hard when only one person is willing to give...even tho I believe love is not a fifty fifty split. Love is giving %100 by both and when its only one giving you do give out...HUGS to you sir
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18 posted 09-17-2000 01:24 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Deer one, somethings just ain't meant to be, no matter what we do.

Corinne
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19 posted 09-17-2000 04:25 PM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

Deer, as always passionate and brilliant. But this one touched a chord in my heart. *HUGS* to you.
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-
Balladeer
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20 posted 09-17-2000 06:02 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I thank you all for such wonderful and sincere comments. Belonging to Passions is wonderful for the poetry but equall as special for the comments and the way everyone literally bares their souls and opens their hearts in their replies. You are all wonderful people.

No, this is not a true life experience. I'm just a poet, that's all, in touch with feelings in life and trying to portray them in a worthwhile fashion. Thank you all for allowing me to.....
juliet_2u
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21 posted 09-17-2000 07:26 PM       View Profile for juliet_2u   Email juliet_2u   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for juliet_2u

Oh this broke my heart, but now after reading your response I'm thanking God no one did this too you....Whewww ya had me worried there for a minute....lol...Loved it.
Juls
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22 posted 09-17-2000 08:43 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent, Balladeer. I'm glad it's fiction for you, though!  

Denise
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23 posted 09-17-2000 08:51 PM       View Profile for Wilfred Yeats   Email Wilfred Yeats   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Wilfred Yeats's Home Page   View IP for Wilfred Yeats

I'll simply say - bravo - well done  
Mark Bohannan
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24 posted 09-17-2000 08:52 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

Glad to know that this is not a real life experience for you.  I don't know how you write without experiencing it but as you said YOU are a poet.  I guess I have some more growing to do because if I dont feel it from true life then I can't write about it.  I guess maybe I am what you might call a begining poet or wanna be.LOL.....I do my best though.  Wonderful write sir....enjoy your talent in all facets you write in.
 
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