We traced the paths of graveyards

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grandiloquent
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since 1999-07-08

Posts 104
Midwest America

0 posted 2000-09-15 02:16 AM

Remember nights in disguise?
we played card tricks and darting eyes against each other
we picked our phrases off each others' mouths, lightly,
and held them out on unruffled palms, and blew them into the air
We traced the paths of graveyards with our shuffling toes;
For romance,
For the idea of innocence (which we did not understand, although we were every bit of it)
And sat back to back to thought to think on porches in the waning wind, grey
with discovery trailing motion of every hand
pulling collars up against the dead temperature, against
the greatness laying near my cheek waiting to pounce through my hair to my chest and gnaw,
subdued, at my wanderlust heart
(still restless here inside my chest, with years and years to give it rest)
I laughed as myself for the First time, with giggles trickling down my chin and over my jiggling belly -- sore from your antics, from the shared breath between us --
But I was terrified of the exposed and
Am still an unopened.
I loved. And that was it. I took it only for what it was
and let it lie there.
(I will always begin with explanations)
(I will always start with apologies under my tongue).

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

1 posted 2000-09-15 04:02 AM

WOWWWWW what a memory of a passion filled night. I truely hope that I caught all that was said in this and read it three times to make sure. Lovely piece and indulge us in more once this one and the other one get their "air" time.

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

2 posted 2000-09-15 01:46 PM

I was slow in finding you but wow am I evr glad I did...this is so evocative and compelling..."we picked each others phrases off each others mouths" what a delicious kiss that must have been

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2000-09-15 10:45 PM

I just have to tell you that I love the way you write...the way you so easily slip out the thought..wonderful!

grandiloquent
Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 104
Midwest America

4 posted 2000-09-16 01:10 AM

Thank you, thank you, thank you, not only for a positive reply, but any at all... I more than welcome any criticism of my poetry - especially from a group of people who obviously take one another's pieces into such high regard. I look forward to posting as well as reading and making my own notations. This is a lovely place to showcase one's work…

Thank you, thank you, thank you, not only for a positive reply, but any at all... I more than welcome any criticism of my poetry - especially from a group of people who obviously take one another's pieces into such high regard. I look forward to posting as well as reading and making my own notations. This is a lovely place to showcase one's work…

Mark: and more! This was written about a full lusty week… thank you for taking a few extra minutes instead of merely a 'browse'.
Paula: it was amazing!

Martie: Thank you for telling! I have yet to find any of your own writings… perhaps you could point me to a post or two?

Wilfred Yeats
Member Elite

since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

5 posted 2000-09-16 01:53 AM

Some really excellent lines here - I find more with each rereading - very well done!

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