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Beautiful Inspiration |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets 
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Except for the few glimmers of dying sunlight, I was alone in this world. Alone and tired. To sleep was to give up, and that I would not do. My quest for a friend led me down different paths, but none quite like this. Luscious and beautiful, firmly packed dirt trail with a babbling brook running 'longside. I was lost in the enchantment, my eyes sparkled with life for the first time in ages. Wondrous music filled the air as I rounded a bend in the trail. A voice so sweet accompanied the delicious sound. I came upon you swaying gently back and forth as you plucked at the strings of a magnificent instrument. You knelt under the boughs of a lovely silver fir, your hair shimmering through the shadows like a guiding star. Enchanting words poured from your lips about wondrous angels and the fruits of heaven. A salty drop escaped my battling lashes as I witnessed your supple beauty and innocent grace. I viewed my mirror of self reprisal and examined the rustic shape that was me. I compared your virgin soul to the damnable sins of mine. Another tear fell from my eye as I whispered the most painful words of my life. "Goodbye" broke into the peaceful accord of your song and you raised your eyes. You saw me walking morosely back down the trail I had come on, as I saved your innocence from the staining darkness of my lonely needs. The beauty of your memory kept me going, as, alone in this world, I searched out a friend whom I was worthy of. Even with a lot of imagination, does it make the story less true? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh man...Go Back...you are so worthy...this is beautiful...what a portrait you have painted with your words...lovely. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Enjoyed muchly. Well written, enjoyed the read. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I think she is the one not worthy |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Powerful and wonderfully conveyed. Wow! So enjoyed reading this. Although, You know you are worthy of her friendship but that was not enough, was it? So glad you did what was just in the sight of God, for your rewards will be eternal. Powerful and great writing.  Love, Marcy"You saw me walking morosely back down the trail I had come on, as I saved your innocence from the staining darkness of my lonely needs. The beauty of your memory kept me going, as, alone in this world, I searched out a friend whom I was worthy of. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
INTRUDER ALERT..INTRUDER ALERT..INTRUDER ALERTHey you silly raccoon - Nice to see ya...  It's about time you come out of hiding and post some of your superb poetry...  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MaskedIntruder~ This was an enchanting write that was greatly enjoyed on this day. Hope we see more. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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MissNTrope Junior Member
since 1999-07-29
Posts 43 |
Sometimes this quest is a life-long journey - I hope you find your dreams early - and enjoy... |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Hey Nan, how'd ya do that dancin raccoon thingy? It's neat. The protagonist in this little epic actually has committed some heavy sins, (which of course you all don't know, because I haven't posted the whole thing yet...), he is on a mission to find the one who will help him reconcile hisself. So technically, no, he isn't worthy of her, and he knows it. The end for now. Even with a lot of imagination, does it make the story less true? |
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