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Tear Filled Eyes (Acrostic)
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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(Just a poem - not a double acrostic - make no assumptions please  )The day that you left the sun left the sky Everyone that I saw, I wanted to die. Are lovers still walking the face of the earth Running and hugging, still filled with mirth? Frost on my window, frost on my heart I want to go out but can't seem to start Lost in a world devoid of all sun Love took a wrong turn now its on the run Everywhere that I look a dark and gloom scene Dour my outlook, nothing is green Eyes just for you, for I can see no other You want a friend, but I don't feel a brother Everything that I see reminds me of you So tear filled eyes are feeling so blue. [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 09-13-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Bill--Love is sad sometimes...It holds so much power...you have written it well. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
What a sad sad write...so happy to know its just that |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Martie- - Lighten up ~G~ I wa enjoying the feelings of being negative Paula - I'm a boat without a tiller - rough ride ~G~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wilfred~ Tears that fall Easy from the heart Are just awaiting the Returning of a spark From some enchanted identity Indelibly written to see Leaving a mark of its own Loving thoughts return Evermore to stay outside Destined not to hide Entering when You think its gone Eternally raptured suprise Smiles now fill those eyes *Thanks for the inspiration, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Marge- I'm overwhelmed - I've never had an acrostic response before - Thank you so much |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Sometimes tear filled eyes, help us see again....How beautiful your expression....*S* always a great pleasure my friend.... Greeneyes~LC |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Tears in a man's eyes- Sign of a tender heart This acrostic is lovely Not to be outdone by Marge, my quipping partner, although, I must admit, she is acrostically superior Who is this man called Mr.Yeats Of Hi Tech and poetic feats His luscious phrase well overheats The forum with erotic sweets I think he chose the name of Yeats An acronym that true completes A portrait filled with unknown treats That essence of his poem secretes Y-oung in form, an athlete’s E-go wrought of bittersweet’s A- liberal mind among elites T-hat functions on computer bleeps S-oftly pulsing to love's beats Just who is this Mr. Yeats? Take care Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 09-14-2000).] |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Yanno, Bill - I really like your poem, and you really nailed it on the acrostic. But those responses are making my fingers twitch, and you seem like such a nice guy, too - lol. I'll have to think about this for awhile. great read, though. *be still my itching-to-acrosticize fingers* |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Bill, I admire your ability to write within discipline, and this piece is all too lovely. I've not tried my hand with an acrostic, but yours is whetting my appetite for a challenge. Now to arrive at a theme... *** Enjoyed this very much, as well as the responses, my ladyfriends. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Green Eyes - You should be the best candidate you've had more than your share - Have faith my friend Liz - To Paraphrase- 'to love me is to know me' LOL (seriously you've written a great poem i'm not sure I deserve- and I'm humbled by your words. Thank you sooo much. Mike- I'm happy to inspire - and I loved your double acrostic and its imaginitive format Claire = I'm the least disciplined person I know - what do you know I don't? Thank you - (and I can't wait for your entry ) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Mr Yeats did your mother warn you not to do those things that you do giving your heart so visible there showing your passion, sharing you care breaking those women's hearts by the score to have them return and drink your words more did you mother not warn you, senstitivity pays now those women will follow you all of your days. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Kethry- OK- #1 - call me Bill alright? I hate formality with friends #2 - I've been posting poetry in other forums now for nearly 3 years - met and chatted with more than a few - and know well at least 4 from 'down under' (2 in Melbourne, one in NZ and 1 in Perth) so I'm wise to 'your' ways - I lead no one on. I figure we're all grown up enough to not get messed up over poetry. (not that I haven't myself - and recently )but I feel fairly certain my profile and 'site' clearly spells out who I am - and that should eliminate the immature. I can and will be a good close friend to anyone who wants to be - but beyond that - it must be a two way street (I know you were 'tongue in cheek' - but I had to speak  ) |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sir Poet Bill...this was exquisite, you have topped my night off with this...thank you for the beauty within the tears! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Holly- two things - #1 a simple "Bill" will suffice #2 - you should know I used to live in Mich. (21 years in fact) in detroit area (warren) and last but not least - thank you ~S~ |
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