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brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
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ireland

0 posted 2000-09-13 07:29 PM


Assembled in the backwaters
of a narrow corridor,
a vessel is crafted on the wheel
of perpetual faith, twisted
out of hand and into flesh
to feast upon
the apple light.
The nurse sanctions
the worm of wraith,
from the confides of her
moral dress, with serpent
wings repressed, all the vice
is denied and crimes anointed.
She wears of guise of the righteous nun.

In the Institute of Faith,
where walls are scared
with the horrors
of Messiah reprise,
the hollow child is baptised.
A modified ideology's inserted
as the shackles of morality
are bound for an eternity.
Negativity is disarmed.
In the bow inflicted
before prime development;
worship before walk.
Assembled a specimen
of purity, sterile and internally
unatoned, Son of Adam, a receptacle  
for the virtues of cleansed society.
He bears the flawless cross,
desiring only the freedom of vile cancer.

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"The party is not concerned with perpetuating itself. Who wields power is not important, providing that the hierarchical structure always remains the same".

"Saints should always be judged guilty until proven innocent".

George Orwell
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This is the hour when the mysteries emerge
A strangeness so hard to reflect A moment so
moving goes straight to your heart" JOy divison




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linda munday
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 315
Adelaide, Australia
1 posted 2000-09-13 08:16 PM


Hi Brian,
Man this is deep!!! I had to read it three times before some lines sank in... then when I finally got the picture... I decided that I really liked it a lot... so Powerful!!! thats with a capital "P".
Brilliant and I'm going back for one more taste.
Take care,
Linda Munday.

Martie
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2 posted 2000-09-13 08:48 PM


brian--I am so grateful for a world that holds people like yourself who think so deep that I, so far away, can feel the earth shake.
Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2000-09-14 09:04 AM


OKAY......burrowing throught the universe to catch up to you....very very provoking and I must admit that it took me about 4 reads to catch it and I am sure I have missed alot so I will print and reread several more times I am sure.  Excellent read Brian.
Effigy
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since 2000-04-11
Posts 486
disbelief
4 posted 2000-09-14 09:48 AM


Well done. So very interesting thought are presented here. I enjoyed.
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
5 posted 2000-09-14 11:24 AM


Incredible work... Brian...

I will come back to this and possibly reply in verse to this... rather add my views in my own way... or maybe simply mail you... lets see... presently living on sort-of borrowed time, I am...

regards, my friend,
Sudhir

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
6 posted 2000-09-14 06:30 PM


linda, Martie, Mark, Effigy, and Sudhir thank you for reading and relying and for for your thoughts and comments on this poem. They mean alot to me. Thank you.

Side note; Sudhir I look forward to hearing your thoughts on this poem, take care my friend.  


"Anyone who challenges the prevailing orthodoxy finds himself silenced with surprising effectiveness. A genuinely unfashionable opinion is almost never given a fair hearing".

George Orwell

This is the hour when the mysteries emerge
A strangeness so hard to reflect A moment so
moving goes straight to your heart" JOy divison

X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
Oregon
7 posted 2000-09-14 11:52 PM


wow

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

8 posted 2000-09-15 12:45 PM


hi BRIAN,

Boy o Boy, you sure have a way...

I'm still catching breath from verse mid-way...

A finely structured poem you've penned needless to say I hope it stays atop for a while so one may frequent a read now N then...

Just in case I'm threading this one
Thank you for a thought provoking read
Dani

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