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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2000-09-13 12:22 PM



This day - so special - transcendent
Is it the transfer of summer?
The sun is covered in haze
The humidity oppressive yet
I am floating cool and serene
My thoughts miles away in flowered fields

The harsh actuality of my surroundings
Glazed with the greater reality
Of your words suspended above my eyes

Buttercups, Queen Anne's lace, and Heather
No box, no instrument here and still
Celestial music flows through the grasses
Winds itself upon the zephyrs
Singing your song, soaring my kite
Carrying me above the clouds

Their downy feel- like rabbit fur
Caresses my skin with your thoughts
A counterpoint made in heaven
A fugue and toccata going beyond
Mere mortal concept layered
In fervent declarations
Breath heavy with meaning
Moans of import too sweet

And so I dissolve in crystal shards
Like sugar glaze as you seep
Into my pores, a venous transfer
Straight to my heart

What magic have you wrought
Upon my soul that I fall so willingly
Into the depths of your being?



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Martie
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1 posted 2000-09-13 12:26 PM


Bill--sounds like you have been sipping from the magic that cupid brews up on hot humid days...this is very beautiful!

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 09-13-2000).]

CocoBaci
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2 posted 2000-09-13 12:32 PM


Lovely poetic expression...
Thank you for sharing...

Coco

Wilfred Yeats
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3 posted 2000-09-13 12:43 PM


Cupid - with his bow and arrows - needs more target practice - I'm getting grazed, but not pierced- - but the feeling is the same -perhaps I missed one entering unseen -   Thanks Martie

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Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 2000-09-13 01:36 AM


So soft and tender a love song, with many wonderful phrases, written by one who's been in love, and falling in love again. This time it's much much sweeter.
This is very beautiful, as usual
Liz

Wilfred Yeats
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5 posted 2000-09-13 08:36 AM


Liz -

your perceptive words tell me you really read my words - and I thank you for your insight - Thank you


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6 posted 2000-09-13 09:34 AM


What magic have you wrought
                 Upon my soul that I fall so willingly
                 Into the depths of your being?


your words do speak like no other, I have read this twice now, and loved it, felt it both times....*S*


Greeneyes~

LngJhnAg
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7 posted 2000-09-13 09:38 AM


Wilfred - a great read - complex, but flowing - the thread of the poem is consistent.  I like the part about the venous transfusion straight to the heart - great metaphor for the way love can drive in from a thousand different directions.  One piece of advice though - even though it may kill you to say it, tell her you love her cat.  Later, when she isn't watching you real close, you can give kitty the boot - lol.
doreen peri
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8 posted 2000-09-13 10:11 AM


quote:
And so I dissolve in crystal shards
Like sugar glaze as you seep
Into my pores, a venous transfer
Straight to my heart


the essence of the poem... in the above lines... excellent stanza!    

~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~

Meadowmuse
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9 posted 2000-09-13 10:26 AM


Bill,
   If a piece of writing transports me to another place, another reality, an enchantment has occurred. I found this poem of yours enchanting.  

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Wilfred Yeats
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10 posted 2000-09-13 01:35 PM


Green Eyes-

thank you - there's magic in your eyes too -
I'm glad I could write something - that touched you

LJ-

Kill me? I like cats   (love dogs more - but  I enjoy cats ~S~ thank you.

Doreen -

Thank you very much - I keep trying  


Claire-

I must say you enchant me as well - I will never fail to read you - thank you

Paula Finn
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11 posted 2000-09-13 01:49 PM


Oh Bill...another story that leaves me aching and longing...how do you write my heart so often?
Honey Bunch
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12 posted 2000-09-13 03:19 PM


"What magic have you wrought
Upon my soul that I fall so willingly
Into the depths of your being?"

Ahh!  The magic of love.
Just visiting from the Corner Pub where I occasionally hang out and was so pleased to find such wonderful words from you.  

Helen

Wilfred Yeats
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13 posted 2000-09-13 11:15 PM


CocoBaci-

I'm sorry I "missed" you on my last reply - thank you for your kind words

Paula -

If I'm writing the words you like - then the poet in you is responding to her muse

Honey Bunch-

Thank you for your sweet reply - I still want to read your poetry here  

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14 posted 2000-09-13 11:35 PM


Excellent writing, Wilfred. Interesting, isn't it, how our minds can place us in environments so far removed from actuality? Love will do that to one......thank you.
Wilfred Yeats
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15 posted 2000-09-13 11:43 PM


Like my signature - I should simply record a reply - to you I can post on demand: "you are too kind- my humble thanks" let me add this time: Yes - love does that
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