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Slouch on the Couch
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Slouch on the Couch |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Slouch On The Couch Thought this time I’d carve out words Beyond witty, to catch your eye To steal you away from that screen, That Coors and pastrami on rye. Perhaps I’d succeed in dragging you From beneath that greasy Ford She’s got more angles than curves Maybe it’s because you’ve gone bored. Could it be male menopause? Hormones run amuck, my dear? I quickly hurl this idea aside Inattention renewing my fear. You used to melt, reading my words Penned to elicit emotion, But bowling boys are beckoning Transformed into a middle-aged notion. So I’ll just write this to our cat At least he listens, he purrs As long as I pet him while I read Although even he demurs. © 2000 Corinne Bailey |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
ICK! I don't think I could be with someone if they began to act this way. Nice poem, and the last stanza is my favorite. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ You just slay me ! LOL !  I love your subtleties ! You are sooooooo cute ! To the cat indeed ! ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I can't speak for all men nor any woman obviously - but I do believe we all go thru cycles - I can remember when loving and closeness were paramount - and then in the nadir of the sine wave - things- (games- cars, bikes, etc) not people- had my attention - the wave has me back on its zenith -and i'm determined to stay there - no cat will rver need to be my surragate -- if ever I can wean her from her grandchildren now. all this blabber is not to say I don't totally agree with Marge - for I do ~S~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
the couch can be a dangerous place for a relationship. better the swing in the garden, or to run behind the hedge groves.... A wonderful piece Corinne. Park |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne--This is sad but it did make me smile...I always enjoy your poetry...now, where's my cat...I must try her out on a verse. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Corinne, What a great verse. I loved the hook at the end. Just make sure you don't get a furball when you kiss. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Corinne, Something that always amazes me about your poetry is the strength of the language and the wonderful words you find to express the thoughts in the most correct way and in more than adequate manner... Wonderful writing.... regards, sudhir |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks, Temptress, just have some fun! Marge, thank you! Me, subtle? Ha, ha ha ha ha ha! My best friend is fond of saying: "Sugar Coat it, Bailey!" Wilfred - Yeah, I know of these phases, guess that's what I was writing of, although it wasn't as stereotypical as this! Park, Park, Park, mind always in another place, another time! Thanks, hon! Kethry, thanks, and ewwwwwwww! Sudhir, thank you for the kind words! Corinne |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"So I’ll just write this to our cat At least he listens, he purrs" love this... love the lines above... oh and hey! glad to hear you're married to my ex-husband now instead of me...umm... i mean, sorry to hear you're married to my ex-husband... geez... what do i mean?  < !signature-->~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 09-11-2000).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Arghhhhhhhhhhh! He told me he's never been married before! Why, that little......)(&#*$&(*&#$(*&#$(*&(#! lol Corinne |
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