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Mike
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since 1999-06-19

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0 posted 2000-09-09 05:50 PM

Helios pauses, as if to listen,
...on crest of distant hill,
Gathering in his burning rays,
...at heaven's windowsill.

Solemn silence, in velvet pall,
...o'er bier of dying day,
As evening's hush falls on all things,
...a calm on land does lay.

Song of the mockingbird rings forth,
...in praise of coming night,
Haunting call of distant loon,
...replies in fading light.

Nature calls to creatures wild,
...my children, heed my call,
Vespers of a setting sun,
...as night on land does fall.

Above the West's horizon,
...fleeced scarf of vapored cloud,
Watched over by lone vestal star,
...moon's sliver does enshroud.

The sky enfolds in beryl shrine,
...from depths of heaven dyed,
Helios clothed in calm eternal,
...slides into eventide.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2000-09-09 06:02 PM

Mike, eventide my favourite time of day, made even more special by this poem.

Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

2 posted 2000-09-09 06:04 PM

Very lovely piece, Mike, loved this stanza especially, great last verse!

The sky enfolds in beryl shrine,
...from depths of heaven dyed,
Helios clothed in calm eternal,
...slides into eventide.

Corinne

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-09-09 06:52 PM

Breathtakingly beautiful, Mike!

Denise

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

4 posted 2000-09-09 07:14 PM

As I read this aloud, it brought to me a delicate, almost "hushed" feeling. There is a calm in your words.

Beautiful.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2000-09-09 07:27 PM

Mike~
There's a kind of hush that comes about
all over the land -

'Nature calls to creatures wild,
...my children, heed my call,
Vespers of a setting sun,
...as night on land does fall.'

So very lovely is this salute to the evening hush.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

6 posted 2000-09-09 09:44 PM

you have written a beautiful verse, I enjoy poems where the 2nd and 4th stanza rhyme.

Kathleen

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

7 posted 2000-09-09 10:06 PM

Mike- first, i LOVE the title... fits the poem perfectly... you've created an aura with this... it's hard to explain but, it's very structured and rhythmic and full of imagery... i had to look up "bier" and "beryl"... so... thank you! not only did i read a fine piece of poetry, but also expanded my vocabulary... hehe

thanks for the read... enjoyed!

~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~

Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

8 posted 2000-09-10 08:22 AM

Kethry... the calm of sunset and sunrise are special times, glad you read and enjoyed.
Corinne...thank you for the very lovely. actually, I started with the last verse (my favorite also) and worked backwards, which I often do..
Denise...thank you ever so much for the breathtaking, hope ya got it back...*smile* want you to be able to converse with that boss of yours.
Claire...it is a hush time of day... and I compose my poetry by saying it out loud which sometimes brings me rather strange looks, but I can only write by sound and feel. Thank you for the beautiful.
Marge... I truly appreciate your reply as you are truly one with nature, as so clearly shows in your writings.
Irish Rose... thank you kindly for reading and replying.
doreen... danke for the very gracious reply.
I wish it was just my vocabulary that is expanding... *smile*

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2000-09-10 11:58 AM

Mike, this is gorgeous!!!

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

10 posted 2000-09-11 08:02 AM

The becoming of the becalming feeling at eventide is most remarkably penned by you, Mike...

regards,
sudhir

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