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Wish You Were Here |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida 
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If You Were Here No rhyme or reason to die before your time all for a mere dime Cob webs entwine around old fishing line a box of hooks, an old how to bass book tell of old times A worn recliner holds an imprint mama rubs the spot, intent on remembering the feel of you Your hat hangs on a hook on the wall like a picture in a frame ... you fought in vain on that hot summer day now nothings quite the same Remember our old fishing spot? still gets hot in the summer wish you were here, I'd bake you a cake Happy Birthday Daddy BloomingRose |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Tender sweet memories penned by you. Shows your love greatly. Beautiful write!  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BloomingRose~ Very tender sentimental render of your heart. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is very touching...soft and gentle...James |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Thanks Mark, Marge,& jmlee, Daddy was killed in 1983. A result of a robbery attempt. Today would be his 72nd birthday. Deb |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Blooming Rose- you touched my heart - and brought back memories - I lost my dad at 23 - a heart attach - after living with a bad heart for 30 years - it got him at 62 [[[hugs]]] ~Just as a sunbeam can't separate itself from the sun and a wave can't separate itself from the ocean; we can't separate ourselves from one another. We are all part of a vast sea of love one indivisible divine mind. ~ Marianne Williamson ~ wilfredyeats@hotmail.com |
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American Princess Junior Member
since 2000-08-21
Posts 49USA |
This brought immediate tears to my eyes...my father is 83 and in ill health. I dread the day he is gone. We take so many people for granted until it's too late to tell them how much we cared.. American Princess It's only me, thinking out loud... |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
I am glad this touched hearts. To lose someone very sudden makes you realize how important it is to show our loved ones we care. BloomingRose |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Oh, this is so tender and touching... well-penned... The title drew me in as I am a big fan of Pink Floyd, but the content moved me a lot... Wish you well... My regards, sudhir |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Sudhir, I am glad you like this, but I have to admit I am not familiar with Pink Floyds music. Just the name of the group. Deb |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Deb A wonderful poem - terrific descriptions, melancholy, and love. It makes me hope my children will write of me in these terms someday. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
My heart goes out to you...you poem shows how much you loved him and how much this day means to you...a beautiful tribute to your father~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoyed the read!!!!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Y'know, I think I need to go spend some time with the folks...thanks for the reminder...this one so sad, it broke my heart. |
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