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Moon Speaks |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I know what the moon speaks of on nights like last, not perfect at all, so shadowed and quartered and distilled by the glow of color from the falling sun. It detailed a cloud and enchanted the sidewalk where I walked darkly around the block and down the alley, the middle of the street my path and lights closing down to sleep the city seemed to all be breathing long pale breaths slumbering in drained verve. I heard a sigh from a driveway an echo of my own it stumbled and dropped at my feet and I stopped, I could hear my own breath and in the silence I had made with my presence no crickets hummed. Then a coyote called from far away igniting another as the tree lined street focused the scent of jasmined air and Vavaldi whispered summer from an open window. I know what the moon speaks it speaks of coupling this solitude of yearning that is almost palpable it speaks of time ticking out and it says leave room for a dance in candle lit room and the wax melting into morning |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
I know what the moon speaks it speaks of coupling this solitude of yearning that is almost palpable it speaks of time ticking out and it says leave room for a dance in candle lit room and the wax melting into morning Martie - great writing! Are you listening to the moon? Then go for it, gal! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You have penned yet again a magnificent piece, you speak of the moon beautifully Martie  Enjoyed it muchly and especially this ....... I heard a sigh from a driveway an echo of my own it stumbled and dropped at my feet and I stopped, I could hear my own breath and in the silence I had made with my presence no crickets hummed. Splendid! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another lovely picture painted by Martie the way only she can do it! Denise |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
If I were to bring you flowers would you teach me to write like this? Oh yeah....you have flowers.....hhhhmmmmm how about I just beg shamelessly. Lovely write and I want to write one with you if you think you can teach me just a tad of you. Pullllleeeeeaaaaaaaasssssseeee....   |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
my out loud reply to this was ahhh yayyy yayyy...... dang I'm jealous, this was incredible and so palpable ~Heather |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Martie - "it speaks of time ticking out and it says leave room for a dance in candle lit room and the wax melting into morning" As I seem to be doing routinely - I've singled out favorite lines - and while the total poem is yet another masterpiece I will add to my treasured collection - these lines will speak to me in my dreams ~One word frees us of all the weight and pain in life. That word is love. ~ Sophocles ~ wilfredyeats@hotmail.com |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Martie Beautifully penned indeed So wonderful to read...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
... .... . . speechless... It detailed a cloud and enchanted the sidewalk where I walked darkly around the block and down the alley, the middle of the street my path and lights closing down to sleep the city seemed to all be breathing long pale breaths slumbering in drained verve. oh oh oh K |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"...distilled by the glow of color from the falling sun." Martie, you just do this incredible thing, every time...I admire, so much, your penchant for creating scenes such as this so beautifully. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"It speaks of coupling this solitude of yearning that is almost palpable it speaks of time ticking out and it says leave room for a dance in candle lit room and the wax melting into morning" Wax melting into morning...that creates such a wondrous image in my mind Martie. Your works are always a feast of graceful images and thought, and this is no exception. *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Then a coyote called from far away igniting another' Oh, how this called to me. It's okay for a GREAT piece of poetry !  Yadda - yadda - yadda ! That's not Tsalagi/Cherokee ! Tee-Hee !  Love you, sis. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Martie* This is whisper soft and enchanting...what a beautiful weave of moonlight you have spun~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
As always, I enjoy reading your work very much! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Long John--that's the best advice I've had. hi there Dark Angel--appreciate your splendid reply...always glad to see you! Denise--thank you again for such a sweet reply. Mark--I'd love to write one with you, but you have to write like you...because that is wonderful! x angel--I love your response...thanks so much. Bill--such dreams you have...they are rich...thank you for such a lovely response. Tracie--thank you for letting me know you liked this poem...I appreciate the knowing. Kamla--if you are speechless then I have done well. Claire--I always appreciate your response..I admire you so much. Krista--What a wonderful thing to say...thank you Marge--You are so cute!! Butterflies...you are the one that spins enchantment...with you sweet replies. Eagle One--I'm so glad you enjoyed this. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Wonderful writing Martie... you have such an amazing talent to create mood and express yourself. The moon did indeed speak; because you brought its words to light. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Aaahh, so magnificently descriptive Martie! If I were to choose a favorite line, I fear I'd copy the whole poem. You've captured sights, sounds and a wonderful mystical feeling within this piece ... very lovely! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
'Twas a lovely thought to be lost in Thankyou |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Awesome work, Martie! Corinne |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--and you my friend have lit my morning with your reply. Kit--thank you for the time you take to reply with such care...it is appreciated! Rex Allen--I'm so glad you stopped by, I've missed you! Corinne--An awesome from you means alot to me...thanks! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The moon speaks from out your pen, in fact you can make anything speak and we will all listen to the enchantment Another great one Liz |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Enchanted, a man without words sits here fiddling his typing fingers to think and type the mesmerised feeling of his heart beauty-benumbed.... regards O Martie, Sudhir |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--you are the one with the enchanted pen, but thank you for such wonderful words. Sudhir--I think that your comment is one of the most wonderful I have ever had...thank you dear one. |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Oh, beautiful! Beautiful! My net connection has been out for about two weeks, so I borrowed Dale's connection on his computer, and what do I see but your breathtaking poem! Wow! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I enjoyed very much. Lovely images |
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