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Meet Me in Paris, 'Neath the Eiffel Tower
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Meet Me in Paris, 'Neath the Eiffel Tower |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon 
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meet me in Paris was her passioned plea meet me near the Eiffel Tower darling you know the place, you know the time he planned to be there, prompt at 10 but traffic and trains took their bite of his precious window of opportunity all the while she stood, heart stilled waiting in agonising silence for his coming 10:29 and still he wasn't there but she'd wait until eternity to bask in his love once more 11:15 her mind raced to accidents other loves, fate, karma and still she knew without a doubt he'd come 12:45 the rain started to fall but no she wouldn't cry he would be there, he would 1:01 beneath the lights of the Eiffel Tower he found her asleep on a bench a bunch of Columbines in her hands bedraggled and love-worn 1:02 he kissed her softly awake and in that moment sealed his eternal fate "Our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything." --William Shakespeare |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Wonderful work... Heather, your work is tower-like... great ... regards, sudhir... |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Heather, Wow...this is wonderful...you're a romantic like myself. So well done. Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
WHEW......I was hoping he would come!!!  This was a terrific weave!!! Great work~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This reminds me of "An Affair to Remember" *S* Beautiful! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Heather! Sooooo romantic! Denise |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ah, yes..... 'Tis not "Sleepless in Seattle" at all... It's really "Sleeping in Paris"... yep - That's it!!! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Heather~ This is so beautifully penned hon ...well done Great read Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
XAngel~ I'm with Suthern on this one - definitely 'An Affair To Remember'. Wonderfully done, lady ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Somehow, I knew he'd show! Excellent piece. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Ah, I hate waiting for the one you want the most...but when he shows finally, it's well worth the wait. Very sweet X Angel, I enjoyed it! *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
This was great Heather, thoroughly enjoyed it Maybe she'd have realised that he wasn't late, she was early, if she'd remembered to set her watch for the new time zone? hehehehe I'm a silly bOy. *hugs* ps love the happy poetry! so much more fun  Eric.< !signature--> "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. [This message has been edited by Eric Williams (edited 09-09-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"he kissed her softly awake." You are making me want to travel to Paris once again...lovely writing...James |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Heather - aha! The ol' romantic side is kicking in and taking over - well... it's about time, Lady! This poem is very special. I sincerely hope that you are able to visit Paris with somebody very very special, and permanent. Wouldn't it be wonderful to have that AND the picture in your living room? |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh... such a beautiful piece. I LOVE love poems... and I LOVE Paris!! It just proves that some things are worth waiting for. Keep up the great work! < !signature-->If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a diffrent drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away"-Thoreau [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 09-09-2000).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sounds like a movie my friend. . . and you know how much I love a good love story. . . Excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
damn, girl! you're one fantastic free verse french writin' queen, you are!!! this one put me there... waiting... i was getting really pissed... LOL... but then, the ending... made it all worthwhile.. thank you for sharing a very wonderful poem! ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Very nicely written. I liked much. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Thanks so much everyone for your replies I think it's wishful thinking of my heart. I did so love writing this poem. And I dunno if anyone noticed, but my poems rarely ever have a happy ending, but this one did, so weird.... ~Heather |
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