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In The Between

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Martie
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In The Between

Summer is drying up and blowing
it has withered and drained the moisture
from all the blooming,
but the sunflowers still hold their heads erect,
they have had their dip and bow,
now time is waiting to seed
and the bees hover around their dignity.

Each minute is crisp with waiting
the crunch of falling,
and it happens so fast,
this precious movement into dry leaves
and the ending of nights under stars
covered only with mosquito netting.

To splash in a midnight’s naked pool
with stars to watch
and the moon portraying
the curved breast of frolic
where fairies hide their winsome wings,
quietly behind the lattice
they entwine their pointy toes
to capture bliss.

And in the between
I dare dream of falling
and turning gravity’s pull,
falling into the stars
like a wish to dance with destiny
in candle light,
a dream weaves threads that stitch me
to the fabric of my reverie,
its truth is nebulous
and a whim can send it crashing
to shatter all the pretty pieces.

How quiet this minute
that gathers me
and waits to see what happens,
and it happens so fast,
this precious movement into dry leaves
and the ending of nights under stars
covered only with mosquito netting.



[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 09-07-2000).]
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~Your words,...*sigh*, so smooth. Such images you portray, and thoughts and feelings you evoke. The title says so much as well, it's perfect for what I feel this was saying. Take care of yourself M. *Peace.
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Very beautiful, Martie.......
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3 posted 09-06-2000 09:16 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

'A dream weaves threads that stitch me
to the fabric of my reverie,' Wow! This verse just jumped out at me! Beautiful, beautiful poem, Martie!

Denise
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4 posted 09-06-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
My stars, woman !

'To splash in a midnight’s naked pool
with stars to watch
and the moon portraying
the curved breast of frolic
where fairies hide their winsome wings,
quietly behind the lattice
they entwine their pointy toes
to capture bliss.'


I've never seen the likes of it ...
you are simply ASTOUNDING !
This isn't just pretty ...
it's exquisite imagery !

What a talent !
Love and admire you.
~*Me*~



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Mike
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5 posted 09-06-2000 09:59 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Truly 'tis a beautiful poem you have given us to savor Martie...
Wilfred Yeats
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To attempt to cull exceptional lines from this - is as to decide which Fabrege egg is superior to the rest - yet I try with my subjective mind too keyed to know I lack the talent:
"And in the between
I dare dream of falling
and turning gravity’s pull,
falling into the stars
like a wish to dance with destiny
in candle light,
a dream weaves threads that stitch me
to the fabric of my reverie,"
Yes - I dare to dream - and especially loved these words yet you must know your whole poem is publishable quality.
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Martie*
I always find an oasis in your words...
thank you for sharing the gift of
poetry that is in your heart and soul~

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Martie,
   With such enchanting words you have so delicately described the "between" ... the Earth's and, of course, our own. Wondrous writing, my friend.  

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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To splash in a midnight’s naked pool
with stars to watch
and the moon portraying
the curved breast of frolic
where fairies hide their winsome wings,
quietly behind the lattice
they entwine their pointy toes
to capture bliss.


Wow  Marge and I must think alike..many  times..I loved this verse as I did  the whole of your poem today..simply beautiful..
~~softly
Maureen
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Spit Fire--Thank you...you for always saying the right thing...this is a lovely comment.

Balladeer--You are short and sweet this evening...thank you for the beautiful.

Denise--Thank you for letting me know with a wow..you know I always appreciate your comments.

Marge--You make me smile with your enthusiasm..I love and admire you also!

Hi Mike...thanks for stoping by for some savoring.

Bill--You have made my day with your words so sweet...thank you...

Buterflies--I am happy to know that you enjoyed this...thank you for your kind words.

Claire--thank you for letting me know that you understand my words...I'm so pleased that you enjoyed.

Maureen--You and Marge like the same verse that I do...thank you for letting me know.
Mark Bohannan
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So now I know what lies between ME and THERE.  I am so glad to have you as my sweet little Jiminy cricket my dear friend.  You paint your words upon my hearts canvas well.
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I'm hushed....

I'm just entering into my spring (after a very mild winter...lucky I) - wish it could last...

How quiet this minute
that gathers me
and waits to see what happens,
and it happens so fast,
this precious movement into dry leaves
and the ending of nights under stars
covered only with mosquito netting

would you like several dots dear?

....


awesome

K


"He looked across the
silky surface of the Severn...
it was a famously difficult
river with fierce tides..."


From Jack Maggs
Sudhir Iyer
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Martie Magic has me thoroughly enchanted...

great....

regards,
sudhir
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So lovely and reads like a song.  I don't often read a poem and wish to have written it, but this is one of those times.  I wish I had written this.  No, I wish I had the ability to have written this poem.

So happy to have read it.

Alison
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