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SpitFire
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0 posted 2000-09-06 01:32 PM


Chalkboard Scribbles

Chalkboard scribbles, dry and tasteless.
With words on tongues, and sticks in dirt.
Overload explosion leaving no trace,
leaving expressions to follow tides of hurt.
Back out to seas, in blood red waters
that swallow years, that gobble pain.
Wash it away, I can't breathe.  
It's always returning, always to gain.
There are no reasons to not let it win, it comes
with a vengeance for my hungry eyes and soul.
My chalkboard scribbles tell tales
of times of purple skies and empty holes.
Holes in skin, and weightless smiles,
of heavy heads and dog track scars escaping you.
Of nights in satin sin, it let me in,
a desperate score before dawn's debut.
Wasted carpet pulls home free from alley's low.
From clawing cries and perspired ways,
fragile hands trace skin, trace counted beats
and ribcage bars in darkened rooms for days.
Chalkboard scribbles cry today
and I can't breathe, I can't refuse
I can't see the way of lighted trees and painted earth.
I can't find the strength for you, to choose,
.....I can't find the weight of worth.

My chalkboard scribbles with tears of black,
cry for sands soft and quiet back.
For timeless safety and secret ways,
for answers to my lost days.
My chalkboard scribbles,...
cry, cry away.



© Copyright 2000 SpitFire - All Rights Reserved
Sunnyone
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1 posted 2000-09-06 02:06 PM



SpitFire...
            It doesn't always have to be pretty to make a deep impression with its content......in fact, I appreciate a poem that I can mull over.  This was written well, and I see images all over the place.
              Great job, my friend!!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Martie
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2 posted 2000-09-06 02:14 PM


Spit Fire--So much emotional impact in your words...no need to be sorry for something so obviously written from your heart, strong is sometimes better then pretty!
JulieAnn
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3 posted 2000-09-06 02:45 PM


This would make a great heavy metal song....i was listening to the radio and a heavy metal song was on while i was reading it and i replaced their words with yours and it worked perfectly!!! Great writing..I loved it pretty or NOT!!  

Julie :)



brian madden
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4 posted 2000-09-06 02:50 PM


SpitFire, an intense poem, very dark imagery, excellently written. It brings back some memories of my school days and my not so fond memories.  

"Think I'm - I'm lost among the undergrowth So much so I woke up I love you all the same"
Manic street preachers
You stole the sun from my heart.

Paula Finn
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5 posted 2000-09-06 03:17 PM


Life isnt always pretty...how can we appreciate the beauty if we never see the ugliness?Powerful write here...who needs pretty when you present such a darkly sensitive piece?
SpitFire
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6 posted 2000-09-06 08:35 PM


~Thank you Sunny for your reply. That meant lots to me.
~Martie, you always seem to know what to say. Thank you kindly.
~JulieAnn, Thank you Thank you!
~Brian, Thanks for always coming by. So sad to have reminded you of such times.
~Paula, thank you much for all you said.  

Denise
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7 posted 2000-09-06 09:23 PM


Very intense and very well written. I wish my 'scribbles' turned out this well! Excellent writing!

Denise

Marge Tindal
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8 posted 2000-09-06 09:33 PM


SpitFire~

Wow ! to the intense emotional outlet.

'Of nights in satin sin, it let me in,'

Just WOW !
~*Marge*~




~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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SpitFire
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9 posted 2000-09-07 10:14 AM


~Denise, thank you for taking the time and for your kind words.
~Marge, you too,...you always make me smile. Thank you for reading me.
*Peace.

SEA
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10 posted 2000-09-07 10:34 AM


SpitFire~ This is deep....very......excellent writing.. -SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB


catalinamoon
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11 posted 2000-09-07 02:52 PM


Powerful, SF, don't know how I missed it earlier. You speak of so much inner turmoil and sadness. Hope it's all poetic liscense.
cat...

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