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Terror Challenge... The Lion (#1)
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Terror Challenge... The Lion (#1) |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Please listen one and listen all An epic tale as I recall To weak of heart I bid adieu For now commence my ode to you. When I was six, or maybe younger Down deep inside, I felt a hunger To see the world, to set my sail As to my quest, I would not fail. I planned escape for dawn's first light For still afraid the dark of night With stealth I crept by parent's door I jumped in fear, twas just Dad's snore. On down the hall to living room I did not know what terrors loom I crouched in fear, TICK TOCK TICK TOCK I sighed relief, just mantle's clock. Then in search of bread and jelly I could not leave on empty belly O' would it cease, this hunger stop I could not reach the countertop. My plan awry, I forged ahead No turning back, once left my bed With firm resolve, I left the house As quiet as a churchyard mouse. Across the lawn, to fence out back Prepared to face unknown attack What evils lurked? I must beware Behind the shed in jungle there. Amidst the leaves, I heard a sound It was a lion! My heart did pound. With razor teeth and claws of steel A certain death, what pain I'd feel. What could I do? I had no gun My only course, turn tail and run Back in the house and down the hall With panting breath, on bed did fall. Then down the hall, I heard a door Was Mom and Dad, they slept no more I heard Mom say, "Now what was that?" "Oh, back door's open, was just the cat." My ode is over, and I must go My tale of danger, my tale of woe It is finished, the lesson heed To all of you, goodbye, Godspeed. |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Absolutely fantastic! Love this!  |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Mike, this was so well done. You portrayed a child's fears so realistically. Dee |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You've captured the imagination and innocence of childhood delightfully with this piece, Mike! I love it! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike, this is wonderful...terror. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Clapping ... smiling ... clapping some more! Wonderful story of childhood terrors Mike ... absolutely adorable in all it's pure innocence. You took me on this journey as surely as if I standing right there within your words! Bravo! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Steve B Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 140Southern PA |
Mike that was just great...What deeper terror than that what we experienced as children.. excellent job.... Steve B“The union of the mathematician with the poet, fervor with measure, passion with correctness, this surely is the ideal” |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Awwwww ! Poor baby ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Just so everyone is aware, this was one vicious cat... I think it had some bobcat blood or maybe even some mountain lion in its lineage... wonder what ever happened to Snookums? oh twell... glad you all enjoyed my little adventure... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed this tale, very much! So somber was your little guy, and so cute. Once I really DID see a wildcat in the wee morning on a cliff behind my father's house. I found my bed again very soon! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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