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Kit McCallum
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Where Memories Flow Like Water

While sitting near a gentle stream, to while away the day,
Far from the chaos of my life, I lift my head to pray;
I look about this quiet scene, the meadows to the left,
The mountains back and to the right, the high, unyielding cliff.

Below a darkened cavern, where the minors dug their gold,
A cave now dark and empty, like my heart, a vacant stone;
"Why can't it be like long ago?  Please take me back in time,"
"To simpler days I treasured so, when life was sweet and kind."

I bowed my head in silent prayer, that I might be returned,
Then suddenly, a flash of light, a crack of thunder heard;
My heartbeat raced, my eyes, they burned, my ears went slightly deaf,
Disoriented, for a moment, stood to catch my breath.

What force of nature had occurred, as daydreams overtook?
I turned to see familiar sights, but dropped to knees and shook!
For wonders of all wonders, as I gazed behind me now,
Was water rushing down the cliff, where none had been before!

I stumbled closer, rubbed my eyes, amazed at what I saw,
'Twas water, high cascading, from the giant cliff above;
Beyond this sparkling waterfall, through sheet, like falling rain,
I heard a sweet familiar voice, 'twas calling out my name.

I hesitated, terrified, but moved toward it still,
And saw beyond the water there, the cave was bright ... light-filled.
In disbelief, I entered then, beneath the rushing flow,
The pounding liquid rushing past, this luminous window.

Drenched and short of breath I exit, to another world,
As dreamscape there unravels, and this fantasy unfurls;
I hear my name, it's called again, I look from left to right,
I scan my new surroundings, as I try to quell my fright.

I'm here, in my old neighborhood, in times that were sublime,
I'm back nigh thirty years or more, transported back in time;
Perplexed, dumbfounded, "Can this be?", I turn from whence I came,
To see a fountain, not the falls, through which I'd heard my name.

And as I stood amidst the coins, in water to my knees,
I heard a softly spoken child, 'twas whispering her dreams;
Her eyes were closed, her head was bowed, a single teardrop fell,
Into the waters there beneath, the fountain's wishing well.

I heard her voice, quite clearly now, this tiny, little girl,
Was praying for a wish that day, a dream ... a miracle.
"Why can't it be the future now?", she whispered out aloud,
"Please forward me to better times, where I'll stand tall and proud."

"Away from all the pain I feel," she sighed, and then looked up,
"Transport me to a better place, where I can be grown-up."
Another teardrop graced her cheek, as slowly then, it fell,
And at that moment, tossed a coin, into the wishing well.

And from my reverie I broke, as then I heard my name,
The voice was loud and clear this time, I turned my gaze that way;
A woman so familiar there, was walking t'ward me now,
With arms outstretched, and gentle smile, I knew this face somehow.

I opened mouth to speak, but then, she passed me by and sighed,
As she bent down, embraced the girl, to comfort as she cried;
"My little one, don't run away, you had me frantic dear."
The woman hugged the little girl and rocked her through her tears.

"You'll grow up soon enough, my sweet, don't try too much, too soon."
"Some day when you are older, you will sing a different tune."
"For everything takes time, my love, just wait a little while,"
"The pain will ease, just give it time, we'll get through this," she smiled.

The little girl grinned back at her, and took the woman's hand,
And there beside the fountain, they embraced, and smiled again;
The woman reached inside her pocket, grabbed a little coin,
And tossed it in the fountain, wished aloud a final time.

She said the words I knew by heart, this wish she prayed, you see,
For there, reflected in the water ... stood my mom and me.
The memories came flooding back, they weren't such simple days,
But time had healed those little wounds, just like they would today.

I watched them as they walked away, myself and my sweet mom,
And turned toward the falling water ... back from where I'd come.

/Kit McCallum
© Copyright 2000 Kit McCallum - All Rights Reserved
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Loved it ...
every word
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2 posted 09-04-2000 11:46 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent piece, Kit! Very well written with a great message. We do tend to glamorize the past forgetting the hurts of those days. I guess we should just always appreciate the present moment and not get hung up wishing for the 'better days' of the past or future. I enjoyed this very much!  

Denise
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3 posted 09-05-2000 01:07 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kit, dear sweet poet~

I've written you the reasons behind these
beautiful tears of rememberance.
Please know that I will treasure this piece
until I see my mother again beyond this life.
Thank you - thank you - thank you.

As poets, we never know when what we've
written is going to reach out and profoundly
touch someone's life ... or do we ?
You have and I thank you.

Bless you for sharing.
Love you~
~*Marge*~



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4 posted 09-05-2000 03:11 AM       View Profile for Sunnyone   Email Sunnyone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunnyone's Home Page   View IP for Sunnyone


Kit,
     All I can say at the moment to this beautiful piece of poetry, is thank you so much for putting it here. Like Marge said, you never know when your words are going to reach out and touch someone's life, and that they did with me.
                 Thank you again....


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!


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5 posted 09-05-2000 04:43 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

This touched me, it really did...

great great work...

regards to you Kit,
Sudhir
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6 posted 09-05-2000 04:54 AM       View Profile for Dee   Email Dee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dee

Kit, this is a beautiful poem, one to make you think. And I think I'll call my Mum tonight.
Dee
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7 posted 09-05-2000 05:01 AM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

How could this not touch any who read it.  Your words are tremendously powerful in this one.  You will find many people loving this and if there were a way for all to see this and it's beauty then I would wish for that to come true.
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8 posted 09-05-2000 06:39 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

~Rex:  Thank you for the "loved it" Rex, I appreciate this a great deal!

~Denise: Oh, you summed my thoughts up beautifully Denise ... thank you so much for reading!

~Marge: You're so welcome Marge. I think that was one the most beautiful and heartfelt e-mail responses I've received ... and thank you again dear Marge. Hugs to you!

~Sunny:  Oh I'm so glad this touched you too Sunny ... there's a lot of hugs going around with this one. Thank you so much!

~Sudhir:  Thank you always for your sweet words Sudhir ... always greatly appreciated they are!

~Dee: Oh Dee ... this is music to my ears. If I've touched you enough to call your mom ... that's thanks a thousand fold. Very appreciated Dee!

~Mark:  Mark, your wonderful responses are so genuinely meaningful to me ... thank you so much for these lovely words!

Much appreciation to all, and thanks for making through some of these long reads  
/Kit
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9 posted 09-05-2000 06:59 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Kit - This is the equal of any of the classics that have been placed into the Forums.  You've related to us all a lesson we all tend to forget - pain knows its time, and its degree.  And in time, it fades as we take on more responsibility.  You've told a wonderful story here.
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Kit, allow me to echo all of the others, as this story has left me rather speechless. Every line, every image, one of a sweetened brilliance, Kit.  

My mother waits for me, also, through our waterfalling fountain. Thank you so much for this lovely poetic gifting of both remembrance and hope.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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Kit,

Your tale has gripped my heart and the tears I cry are those of sweet remembrance.  I lost my mom 8 years ago and oh what I wouldn't give for a chance to see such a beautiful sight as the one you have painted here.  This was superb.  You have captured every detail very well.  I really enjoyed this one.  

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats
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12 posted 09-05-2000 08:00 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Good gracious!!! I guess this will teach me to be away for awhile... I get blown away by your talent! *G* Wonderful read, beginning to end.
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~LngJhn:  What an incredibly wonderful response LngJhn ... thank you so much for these words!  

~Claire:  Oh Claire ... It is my turn to be speechless ... you're so welcome ... your words mean so much to me, thank you for this!  

~LoneWolf:  I'm so sorry for your loss LoneWolf ... and so glad I was able to bring a moment of sweet remembrance for you, thank you and take care.  

~Suthern:  Hello Suthern! Wow ... glad you're back and enjoyed the read, thank you sooooo much for the wonderful response. I appreciate it!  

Much appreciation to all,
/Kit
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Thank you Kit.  Just had to come back and add this gem to my library.  

It is wonderful.

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats
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15 posted 09-06-2000 11:19 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Kit*
Your talent to capture moments and memories
like this is absolutely amazing...I stated
when I came here to Passions that my
responses would always be from my
heart...you make that so very very easy to
do that...this is beautiful~

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Kit, what can I say? This is really brilliant...well-planned and well-penned. You have a style that warms the heart of the old balladeer.....
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I knew when I saw the title, that this one was going to be good...WOW.  Truly a unique, and touching story poem...my favorite style as you know!  *sigh*  Lovely, just lovely!  So glad I didn't miss this one!  Bravissimo dear Kit - keep telling those tales, they're so beautiful!  
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~LoneWolf: Oh I loved that ... thank you again LoneWolf! I am honoured!  

~Butterflies:  What a wonderful response Butterflies ... I'm so glad you enjoyed, and left me with these incredibly beautiful thoughts to treasure. Thank you!  

~Balladeer: A great big thank you hug to you Balladeer from this humble student ... for you are the Master! These comments sincerely meant the world to me, I thank you so much!  

~PoetFemme: It's so great to have you back PFF! Thank you so much for these wonderful words of encouragement ... I really appreciate it!  

With MUCH appreciation to all,
/Kit
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Kit, Kit, Kit,
Magnificent!!!! With a capital M and four exclamations marks.
This is truly inspired and wonderfully written, and long but at the same time, so short that I wished it was longer.
Thank you for sharing such a beautiful piece of work... as artistic as any classic.
Loved it...rave rave rave  
Linda Munday
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i can honestly tell you that this poem is one of the most beautiful pieces i have ever read on this website.

i am literally crying from reading it. it is classic, kit! absolutely classic!

i cannot tell you how deeply this poem touched me. there are no words. often, on these poetry bulletin boards, i read comments by others such as i am making here and i wonder about the sincerity of them... so i hope you know that i am not saying this lightly...

thank you so much for writing this. on monday, when i have a printer available, i will print it out and save it... as something i will always treasure  

~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~
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Fantastic work, Kit!  This is definitely a keeper, one that should be submitted to poetry magazines!

Corinne
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Kit,

I am in awe.  I'm quite serious....this is remarkable.  You've really done such a wonderful job here.

Michael


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"Love is space and time measured by the heart"
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23 posted 09-09-2000 11:16 PM       View Profile for ellie LeJeune   Email ellie LeJeune   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ellie LeJeune

Dear Kit; This is one of the most beautiful poems that i've ever read, and oh, how it touched my heart. My mother passed away many years ago, and just today I was crying as I heard her favorite song on the radio and my 12 year old daughter, Laura, hugged and comforted me. This wonderful poem is a comfort too. Thank you. Love, Ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL
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kit-
  wow...this is incredible...one of the
  most beautiful and touching poems I have
  ever read.  this brought tears and
  goosebumps...touched me deeply.  thank
  you so much for sharing.    

  -vicky

p.s. a big 'thank you' to marge for pointing
me in the direction of this beauty.  

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet.
                -vlraynes


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