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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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I've refrained from posting much lately... My mama taught me that if I can't say anything nice, don't say anything at all... and my muse seems to have visited only to make my wallowing a tad more poetic than "Life sucks!" LOL (And there are, after all, only so many ways I can say I miss Toerag... even if I borrow from his extensive vocabulary! *G*) At any rate... I've spared you long enough. LOL. This one is a couple of months old now... I AM surviving this upheaval... and with Toe posting again, I can even imagine enjoying life once more!! *S* (Brief pause for a suthern YIPPEEE! *G*) Damage Report Each and every box unpacked reveals That care was taken in this deal. Very little could be improved In the way my belongings made the move. Joe Montana's autographed book, Porcelain with a Bavarian look Made it without incident - Nary a ding or crack or dent. Baccharat crystal, Steuben cats, Hand-embroidered linen mats All came through unmarred, intact. So why did the stupid packer lack Attention in caring for her heart? It lies broken, ripped apart, Tossed into the trash, ignored Leaving this gaping, oozing sore. New beginnings? What a joke! I'm unhappy, lonely, broke... A whimpering ball of misery. Where the hell did I pack ME? |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wow...what a cry for help!!!!! You have penned a beauty in pain and sorrow. Has any body seen Toerag for this poor girl? Hold on to all the packing...you got to be in there somewhere. Have you checked in the sugar bowl? Sweet is found where sweet has been. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You are there dear..in the lace and linen drawer..along with all the other beautiful keepsakes! Keep smiling even if it hurts!  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
where the hell did I pack me?? oh lordy auntie... am I all too familiar with that feeling... and the accompanying one that goes with it.. best penned by lennon and mccarthy so many years ago... oh that magic feelin nowhere to go... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
HuggsZzzzzz |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Suthern~ So nice to see you. I hope you'll drop in often. We have a search party out for 'you'. Love ya', gal ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Suthern~ I really like this..... I know what that feels like....  -SEA Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
teach me to be busy working......almost missed this one.....great poem.....I don't know this feeling, but I lost my medical cards (both copies) and have looked everywhere for them, does that count??? *bg* sure is good to see you, and this was one heck of an step back in.....great writing girl |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
teach me to be busy working......almost missed this one.....great poem.....I don't know this feeling, but I lost my medical cards (both copies) and have looked everywhere for them, does that count??? *bg* sure is good to see you, and this was one heck of an step back in.....great writing girl |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Suthern-I know the feeling of packing away feelings and parts of yourself, a very touching piece. Give yourself a lifetime of trying to put it all together. Hugs. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Mark: How very kind of you... thank you! *S* PDV: You sweetheart... If I haven't thanked you before for always being so welcoming and supportive, let me remedy my lapse... THANK YOU! (And I'm trying... *S*) LR: A far cry from "Feelin' Groovy"... right? *S* Thanks... especially for the leather huggz! *S* Marge: There was a time when I wasn't hard to find... just look for Toe! LOL. But this shadow even loses herself when he's not around. *G* SEA: Thank you... I know you understand. *S* Corazon: Work enough for me while you're at it, wouldja? *G* (And NO, medical cards don't count!) Gemini: Hmmmm... Did I forget to mention I have no patience? *G* Thank you all very much... your kind words are greatly appreciated! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i read this yesterday and wanted to reply but i didn't have time at the time... so I'M BACK!!!! first, let me say that i could totally identify with this piece and... i know, as a writer, you want the reader to feel what you're writing... well... i felt it... too much... i have a poem in the works about packed boxes... they are still packed... i don't know when or if or whether i will unpack them... but that's me... and this is YOUR poem... and ... it's... very YOU and very very special... and if i could reach out through this screen and hug you, i would do it but since i can't... i'll just say... thanks for coming back to Passions and sharing this with us... we have missed you and your writing |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Hi Suthern ... great to see you again! What a wonderful poem. Beautifully crafted ... and the emotional impact of the last verse was superb! I hope you will find "you" soon. Take care, Best wishes, /Kit |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
wow this was a major hit home for me right now! I loved this. I related. It hurt. Ouch.. ~H |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Geesh, suthern - I surely understand - I never know where I've hidden myself either... Nice stuff here..  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Kit & Nan: Thank you both so very much! Doreen: I'd take that hug in a heartbeat! *S* Your poems touch me deeply... as does your welcome... Thank you! X-Angel: I'm glad you loved the poem... and if hugs across the miles would help the hurt, you have mine. |
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