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I ate a rat!... for the humour challenge...
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I ate a rat!... for the humour challenge... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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I ate a rat! I ate a rat! But the rat squealed on me I ended up with a Delhi tummy I ate a rat Maybe the rat, he ate me! The rat ate me! The rat ate me! Me and my big, fat, round, tummy. Oh! The poor yesterday's healthy me Was today's poor skinny sickly me! Me and my poor wretched skimmed tummy. And then... And then- I ate a cat! I ate a cat! The cat followed the rat inside me The cat, she ate the rat inside me Oh yes, the cat was my pied piper Oh yes, my tummy was the city of Hamelyn The cat helped me! The cat helped me! But I did not eat a fish that I had promised to the cat, her food, favourite catfish. Not at all did it help my tummy! For the cat was simply too heavy Heavier than lead, weighed my tummy Almost in a bursting spree, was me. And I burst! And I burst! Into squeals of tickled laughter As the rat inside the cat began to squeal. I laughed, I laughed, I laughed. I laughed as loud as loudness itself I laughed as much and as far as I could And then... And then- I cried, I cried and stayed in a cry For my tummy exploded like a balloon And there lay exposed, I - a dead baboon! ----- This is a repost from the English workshop for a repetition challenge... I am too lazy, it seems, to come up with a new one... maybe tomorrow, but then the day would disappear...  Does this tickle?  ------ [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 09-04-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sudhir, you've got to have a stomach for this kind of poetry (Luckily I took my nausea pill this morning). Now I am able to laugh. Yes it tickled the funny bone of absurdity. I never knew what was coming next! Please don't eat your computer mouse so you can send us more like this one. This is one of those poems that should be read aloud. Think I'll try it on my children today. Thanks for the Hamelyn humor Liz |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sudhir, this is reminescent of "there was an old who swallowed a fly" I really enjoyed this and you get an extension to submit your work 1 day later, for your honesty. Kethry  "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Such a battle going on in that tummy of yours! How do you spell relief....Rolaids? Tums? Alka Seltzer?  --...chanson~ "Music, when soft voices die, Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
jjjjjeeeeezzzz my friend....we must do something about your diet. This one tickled yes my friend it tickled. Now as for how to spell relief...I spell it P-O-E-T-R-Y. Well done my friend well done.(got any fur balls in there?) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...and the burst baboon by the light of the moon was penning in poet's chair... ..Did you ever see the rat? ..He was running from Sudhir's cat... HEHE... just couldn't resist a bit of a refrain there, my friend.. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Suddenly I'm not hungry! But I'm giggling! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Liz, I am hoping to see what the result was on your children, please feed them proper food first Thanks a lot....Thank you so much Kethry... Chanson~ RRRReeeeLLLLLeeeeeAAAAAFFFFF... like tealeaf...  Thanks a bunchOh Mark, thanks for coming by to see the splits of this baboon... Nancy, my friend, you are welcome... glad that this was funny... Poet deVine, Glad to see you here and I am extremly happy that you are giggling... Thanks My regards to all, Sudhir. P.S. Imagine this to be in the cold war period, when spies (rats and moles) were planted all over the place, to double-cross and triple-cross (eh? whatzthat? ) ... and then come back to this one... what a far-fetched idea |
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Steve B Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 140Southern PA |
BURRRRRRRRRPPPP!!! ~ Sudhir..excuse meeeeee but that was sooo good .......lol always enjoy your perspective...  Steve B“The union of the mathematician with the poet, fervor with measure, passion with correctness, this surely is the ideal” |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hey Steve, Thanks a bunch... BURP back... regards, sudhir |
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