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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2000-09-03 01:00 PM



The battlefield set with stainless steel
The prisoner gazed at the scene, surreal
he with his simple military eye
the soldier known as the 'Lower GI’

The prodding came in southern climes
words expelled, not allowed in rhymes
Such pain he felt but bore with grace
probing ‘trenches’ far from his face

When torture done, he rose to go
hoping never again, this pain to know
He took it all with typical grit
it was a long time before he could sit


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Mark Bohannan
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1 posted 2000-09-03 01:07 PM


ROFL-I do believe you have met the challenge well.  Great one PdV.
doreen peri
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2 posted 2000-09-03 02:07 PM


ROFL!!!

Loved it!!
  

BSC
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3 posted 2000-09-03 02:57 PM


HAHAHAHAHA .....Great job Sharon, hey, were these GI's.... ????drafty, oops, I meant drafted?????  Bonnie

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Dee
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4 posted 2000-09-03 03:17 PM


Very funny, well done!
Dee

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 2000-09-03 05:11 PM


Thank you! This was written as a tribute to WhtDove's hubby.  
WhtDove
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6 posted 2000-09-04 01:14 AM


ROFLMBO!! Sharon this is hillarious! Well, especially cause we didn't go through it  
Love how you portrayed it!!!

Sudhir Iyer
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7 posted 2000-09-04 06:19 AM


HA HA HA HA  
    

regards,
sudhir

WhtDove
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8 posted 2000-09-04 11:10 PM



Denise
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9 posted 2000-09-04 11:26 PM


Very clever, Sharon! ROFL  

Denise

Kethry
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10 posted 2000-09-05 08:12 AM


Suppose you think that was funnee... Well it was.

Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

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