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The Journey
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The Journey |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada 
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Life's journey is so arduous Yet I did plod along Each time a road did intersect I prayed to not choose wrong. I've passed some folk, upon the trail Said my piece, and went my way Shared love and laughter with a few But, alas, none chose to stay. I've walked alone down many paths O'er mountains crest, meadows wide Through clutching vines and rivers cold At the crossroads, sat and cried. The sun, it seemed, had lost its heat The nights, too long and cold The hills loomed higher every day My heart was growing old. But ever onward I would delve Never sure about my quest With limbs of lead and ribs of thorns Each day, I'd try my best. That final night I eased myself To rest, beneath the stars Defeated, weary, terrified From a journey gone too far. Then as I slept a tortured sleep And willed my soul to fold The scent of dewberry filled the air Your hand, for me to hold. You found me in my darkest hour Held me 'til the rising sun At dawn, you helped me to my feet Said 'Our journey's just begun'. Life's quest, it now has meaning Gentle grass, or jagged stone Through this journey, never ending You're not meant to walk alone. And so our travels linger on You stay right by my side Without you on that fateful night My soul, it would have died. Though time shall one day claim my life Don't say goodbye to me I'll wait for you beneath the stars To walk, eternally. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"With limbs of lead and ribs of thorns" great line here... aren't you the lucky one to have found love like that!!! ... and you have penned it with such feeling... enjoyed this read.. thank you.  ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
With words as strong as this it has to be a real deal. You are truely blessed and this is one very powerful piece. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good morning Trew, This is a very beautiful writing you have done. I'm glad that I came by this morning to see it. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Trew, Ecellent writing. I enjoyed the read very much. |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Trew this was wonderful. We all have our journey to travel and in time we find that special one to travel with. |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
This was sort of an interesting foray for me. I am trying to get this rhyme and meter thing down, but... whew! Doreen ~ Lucky indeed! You know, I have no idea where that line came from... 'ribs of thorns'. It just sort of wrote itself. Huh. Thank you for reading and replying! Mark ~ I'm hoping it's real  If not... uh-oh! Glad you found it powerful, that's cool. Appreciate it.Bill ~ Good morning to you as well! I'm so very glad you enjoyed this and that you took the time to stop by. Seymour ~ I'm honoured to hear you say that. Thank you. kitkat ~ Thank you! I do think it's important to have someone with you. A friend, a family member, whomever. The trick, I have found, is not to go it alone. And if that person happens to be your love, then all the better! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hiya Trew, My compliments to you on this poem you share... "then as I slept a tortured sleep and willed my soul to fold scent of dewberry filled the air your hand for me to hold" This speaks volumes... Coco |
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Diane Yvonne Junior Member
since 2000-08-22
Posts 36Camdenton,Mo. USA |
What a wonderful poem, it held such beauty and strong thoughts. Great Job!!! Diane When you can't say it in words, write it in poetry. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Trev~ I looked back to find this and what a wonderful read it was indeed....well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Trew~ Oh, what a lovely read. Superb piece of work, my friend. I'm glad it floated to the top ! *Thanks, Tracie 'Though time shall one day claim my life Don't say goodbye to me I'll wait for you beneath the stars To walk, eternally.' Soft and eventful read. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is incredible writing... great work, Trew... most enjoyed... regards, sudhir |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Trew~ Since I adore Doreen's poetry, I found it not surprising that her favourite line was my favourite line. "With limbs of lead and ribs of thorns" Gorgeous read, and don't worry I can't rhyme and they ain't thrown me outta here yet. ~Heather |
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Ann Member
since 2000-07-07
Posts 64Australia |
This was a terrific poem... "Though time shall one day claim my life Don't say goodbye to me I'll wait for you beneath the stars To walk, eternally" was my favourite stanza...it expressed love so beautifully! Take care and be happy |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
hello Trew ... this is a very nice read ... a beautiful piece ... |
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jlocke Member
since 2000-09-10
Posts 169CC,TX |
 WOW Love is the law, love under will. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Trew* This is fantastic...I'm in awe of the talent and the sheer beauty of this piece...**sigh** the journey was well worth the destination~ Excellent writing~ |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Trew~~~ This is beautiful....what a journey you have taken us all enjoyed it very much!!! Julie :) |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Great poem! Your journey to love sounds just beautiful. Nice read. Must send this on another journey! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh Trev...I am so glad this is a sleepless night else I never would have found this beautiful piece. YES YES YES...you speak my heart here...thank you |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Oops! I seem to have let this one elude me for a while. As such, I would type a full page if I responded individually.  Thank you all for your wonderful words. I am honoured that so many took the time to read and to reply. I know that it is commonplace here, as that is the purpose of the forum, but it still leaves me smiling every time. Thank you all again, Trev. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Trew, Somehow this one slipped by me!! I am so happy to have found it. Truly a beautiful write my friend. So romantic and pure. Excellent writing, Trev. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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