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JamesMichael
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0 posted 2000-08-31 06:15 PM


Quivering in your sight

Just like rocky road ice cream
I melted right away when I found you in my dreams
and like a bowl of fresh strawberries
smothered in delicious whip cream
my desire to eat was incomplete
until I could make her scream.
As those sweet succulent strawberries
surely took my will to resist away
so it's true have you my dear
when you came into my dreams to play.
Cannot resist a yummy banana split
as each tasty layer delightfully unfolds.
Love it when you insist to kiss my lips
my desires soon destined to explode.
Starving to squeeze and hold you tight
wondering will you please do that for me
til you whip cream my amorous appetite.
And as I see and taste you sweet cherry lips tonight
you will remain my magnificent jello delight
and surely I will always quiver in your sight.

Jameslee@August21,2000





[This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 08-31-2000).]

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poutprincess
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1 posted 2000-09-01 05:41 AM


what a delicious way to express your admiration for this girl!
i liked this alot!
~Dawn

"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos



Sudhir Iyer
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2 posted 2000-09-01 05:43 AM


all that talk of food makes my tummy quiver in anticipation...

40 minutes for lunch... I am hungry...
and you seem to be have hungry eyes in love...

regards, James...
sudhir

Paula Finn
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missouri
3 posted 2000-09-01 01:16 PM


Hi James,

What a luscious treat you have penned here my friend...such a high calorie delight....MMMMMMMMM

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2000-09-02 07:57 PM


Thank you poutprincess, Sudhir, and Paula for your hungry responses...strawberry fields forever...James
Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2000-09-02 08:46 PM


Oh James ... I gained a few pounds just reading this delicious poem. Great imagery ... excuse me now, I'm hungry!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

rosepetals25
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6 posted 2000-09-02 09:00 PM


James,

   A fun expression for your longing of someone.  I liked this poem.... but now I have a craving for a bannana split

                    rp25

JamesMichael
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7 posted 2000-09-14 03:17 PM


Thank you Kit and Rose for your wonderful comments...James
LngJhnAg
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8 posted 2000-09-14 03:33 PM


James - I saw the topic title and immediately thought I had pushed you too hard - lol.  Great theme writing - you held to it consistently, and used some really terrific similes - some of them erotic - to convey your feelings.  I enjoyed it.
Meadowmuse
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9 posted 2000-09-14 03:57 PM


Ooohh...my...goodnesss...
Auguste
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10 posted 2000-09-14 04:03 PM


YUM!  Now I'm hungry....


Michael


Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Marsha
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11 posted 2000-09-14 04:13 PM


James, delicious, diet be hanged. Lovely made my mouth water. Splendidly visual, love this.  
Nate Dogg
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since 1999-11-15
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Georgia, Fulton
12 posted 2000-09-14 04:53 PM


Hey Jimmy, what a deliculously penned piece you have here. I feel like eating Jello now!
Great piece and great imagery! This is definitely one your more creative pieces, in my opinion.

Nathan

Rosebud1229
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13 posted 2000-09-14 05:34 PM


Why Jmlee I believe you've got a sweet tooth!

X Angel
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Oregon
14 posted 2000-09-14 11:46 PM


LOL
I have this automatic whipped cream maker...for my espresso bar. Tis quite an invention! *wink*

Anyhoo, awesome poem, what fun!

~Heather

CocoBaci
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15 posted 2000-09-15 01:04 AM


             
6  7  8  9  10
That's as many seconds I need
To raid my fridge for fudge sauce
And an ice cream treat

Oh James, charm shines thru this one

I can't stop giggling it's sooo cute...

Seriously though, I enjoyed this read!


[This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 09-15-2000).]

Victoria
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16 posted 2000-09-15 01:10 AM


I love chocolate ice cream and I had
ben and jerrys tonight..believe it or not it had fudge fish in it ha ha with carmel and marshmello...no more for another month or so ha ha ...enjoyed the poem James..

Eloise
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17 posted 2000-09-15 01:10 AM


What a wonderful treat and now I'm hungry!  
Beth
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WA, Australia
18 posted 2000-09-16 08:54 AM



~This was delightful.
Put a smile on my face!!~


~Cherie~

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