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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 08-30-2000 04:46 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dopey Dope

Yes well, Here's a poem for those who's bordom has outshined the sun.

Saving to die:

Tis the hate O lord, that comsumes thy soul
Tis the ignorance of thee that betrays human whole
Tis the passion of thy heart that plunges thy mind
Yet in thy heart love you'll soon find.

O kinsman, O brother, your ways but amuse me
O kinsman, O brother it is the heart that kills thee
O kinsman, O brother ,
your life is but a game.
O kinsman, Or another,
it will never be the same.

O lord but thou hath no sense in reason
Tis spring, time of love, not a time of treason.
O lord if thou permit me, I must imply
that this thief,raper, killer is but a fly
buzzing and bizzing among our food
trying to but make us have a bad mood.

O kinsman, thou doth know logic of life
I will abide to thee to with hold my death knife.
Tis thee who hath love in this black hearted rat
So tis thee who will die, how about that?


comments?....none?.....some?.....ok

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1 posted 08-30-2000 04:58 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

wow you were so great.
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2 posted 08-30-2000 04:59 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Oh hey thanks, I appreciate it.
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3 posted 08-30-2000 05:04 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Finely rhymned but I will require an explanation of the poem at this time.
Welcome to Passions.
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4 posted 08-30-2000 05:12 PM       View Profile for English Rose   Email English Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for English Rose

Well, someone obviously got their cum-uppance here....but it was definately not you Dopey!....well done
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5 posted 08-30-2000 05:17 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

The poem was written in a time of utter dissapointment. I was backstabbed by a "friend". This poem is about a lord and a kinsman and in the end the lord backstabs his kinsman.
The kinsman, out of compassion, tries to save a thief. The thief symbolizing the situation that was occuring in my life, and the kinsman being me, that ever so foolish human to befriend somebody that ubused of his power. The lord was my friend simply informing me that in order to abby to the agreement in which I wanted, he would have to backstab me.
Hope that helped.
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6 posted 08-30-2000 06:57 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

I enjoyed this tale...the structure, the language, the symbolism...and look forward to reading more of your compositions.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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7 posted 08-30-2000 07:48 PM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

Quite a poem you've penned here very powerful in expression.

Coco  
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8 posted 09-23-2001 01:10 PM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Finally found your first post. YES!  

Now this is so different to what you are writing now. Like really, really different. It really does display just how much talent you have in that head of yours. God knows there has to be something besides air.  
Whoever it is about certainly doesn't sound too good for you. Now if you haven't already killed them, how's about I come over and we make a day of it? lol  

Now in all seriousness *gasps* this is a fantastic piece. Nothing should be changed because damnit! You're too good. Be crap for once would you?  

~AF~

Kookaburra sits in the old gum tree, merry, merry king of the bush is he. Laugh! kookaburra LAGUH! Kookaburra how gay your life must be.

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9 posted 10-05-2001 07:44 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

From First to last a great poet, You will be truly missed.

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10 posted 10-05-2001 10:24 AM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
I hope you enjoy your stay here.
...The laughs, the crying, the hugs, its all part of the dillio...
Brother, thank you.
**Massive Hugs**
  ~Carly.

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"Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught."
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11 posted 11-20-2001 02:06 PM       View Profile for sleepymoongirl   Email sleepymoongirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sleepymoongirl

So you knew he was going to backstab you yet you went ahead willing to get hurt? i wouldn't say it was foolish but refreshing in the thought that there are people like that out there even tho there are many it is often over looked...sort of confuzzled but from what i understood of the poem i liked it

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.  

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12 posted 01-13-2003 03:10 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

where you been?
aRiEsAnGeL
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13 posted 12-02-2004 02:40 PM       View Profile for aRiEsAnGeL   Email aRiEsAnGeL   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aRiEsAnGeL

hey....you sound like an awesome guy.I hope you like it here.I have only been on for maybe a year.My mom is passing shadows.I will talk to you soon.
 
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