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nona
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since 2000-03-03
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0 posted 2000-08-30 03:27 PM


In Unison

A long time ago
in a far away place
our steps fell in line
in unison pace.

We tramped along in
comfortable measure
being together was such
sweet pleasure.

We shared our hopes,
our dreams, our woes.
When did we start to
step on each others toes?

And now we've parted,
out searching another,
who's steps match
our own measure

But we both know
we have memories to
forever treasure.

Of the times gone bye
when we marched
in comfortable measure.
..................................nona



© Copyright 2000 Nona-Madonna Neumann - All Rights Reserved
LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

1 posted 2000-08-30 04:23 PM


Oh what a wonderful poem! I loved it so much! Why would people who match perfectly and know it would want to go looking for someone else?
LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508
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2 posted 2000-08-30 04:26 PM


nona - I like the metaphor you used, and the way you developed it.
nona
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since 2000-03-03
Posts 139
Fla
3 posted 2000-08-30 09:27 PM


always good to see what others make of what you pin.
LM perhaps they just "out grew" each other??
thanks to both of you for taking the time to comment.

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