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Adultery by Design

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Alicat
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0 posted 08-29-2000 11:13 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alicat

There are some, of whom tis said
Sleep in another's marriage bed
And then insist
There was no tryst
It's all in the spouse's head

In secret places throughout the town
They nightly go to fool around
Ignoring the price
Of their vice
If proof is ever found

There are cheats who spend the time
Penning soft romantic rhyme
Laying the bait
For someone's mate
Adultery by design


Alicat
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1 posted 08-29-2000 11:40 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

can I just smile here, Ali?   and definitely, A Toga Party is called for...

Hugs to you.
Christopher
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2 posted 08-29-2000 11:45 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

It's amazing that there exist such low-lifes who would do this. Sad and pathetic really.

Ali, you did a fabulous job with this, penning it in a style which so well reflects the game which they take their actions to be, even though it hurts others.
Poet deVine
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3 posted 08-29-2000 11:49 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Ali! This is so good!!! One of your best. And I fear the subject is quite timely. We've had quite a few discussions of affairs and adultery lately. Good job!  
Nan
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4 posted 08-29-2000 11:53 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Geesh, Ali.... you know how to come on strong... Hope you don't offend anyone, huh?... OH well.... They can't be offended if they're not doing stuff they shouldn't be doing, can they?... Nice job here, Persnikitty...
redwriter1
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5 posted 08-30-2000 12:02 AM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

May I just say, that all the romantic words in the world.. cannot tear you away from the one you truly love.

So it's not the person laying the bait that's the problem.

You could lay all the bait in front of me you like, doesn't mean I have to bite... unless im very very hungry....

(just a thought)..(and it's not personal) lol
Nicole
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6 posted 08-30-2000 12:57 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Bravo, Ali...bravo!  Very well said, and unfortunately all too true.  Shame, 'tis.
X Angel
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7 posted 08-30-2000 09:00 AM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

*big sigh*

I have no reply to this, can't form the words....but wow this packed a punch!
LY ya big fe-Lion

~H

PS the big meanies, suckerin us poor wimmen in.... :P~*
Paula Finn
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8 posted 08-30-2000 11:20 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

Wow Cat...this just says everything doesnt it? Way to go

[This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 08-30-2000).]
JamesMichael
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9 posted 08-30-2000 04:38 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Thought provoking...
a woman finds herself in a marriage where the husband does not appreciate her and is critical of her.
a man approaches the obviously unfulfilled wife and admires her and appreciates her.
Which will she desire?
Sometimes it is time to move on...
If she does she can only hope the new one will not become exactly like the first one after marriage.
Perhaps he just wanted the fun with none of the reponsibity a marriage requires.
It happens all the time.
Make sure the love is reallllllll...James

ATTENTION...I don't know why I feel the need to come back and defend my thoughts...I am not trying to rewrite or imply the meaning or gender of this poem.  Only expressing my feelings that were inspired when I read this poem...The poem stands upon it merits and my response does not reflect the thoughts of the poet...only me...Thank you very much...James


[This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 08-31-2000).]
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10 posted 08-30-2000 05:20 PM       View Profile for English Rose   Email English Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for English Rose

Well, Ali...unfortunately I know your words to be true.....
But I have to say that the poem was great!
sonjes
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11 posted 08-30-2000 05:45 PM       View Profile for sonjes   Email sonjes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sonjes

I know I am missing something...but something tells me I should be glad that I am.
  SO, regardless...I think that your poetry is quite intense and your pen seems to have a magic hand and mind guiding it.  This poem is all too true...fantastic writing!!!!

Don't care what people say
Just follow your own way
Don't give up and use the chance
To return to innocence.
-Enigma

Local Rebel
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12 posted 08-30-2000 06:04 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

I find it interesting how this conversation has unfolded.. I think the poem (an excellent expression of the human condition) and the responses show how readers can inject their own paradigms into a well crafted verse....

here ali makes no mention of gender, and yet some readers assume he means men do the baiting of 'poor innocent women'....

good job cat..!
Bill Charles
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13 posted 08-30-2000 10:27 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

Hello Alicat,
I believe this is my first visit to your place. I'm glad I stopped by. You told it like it is, and it's well done. See you again.
Jenn E
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14 posted 08-30-2000 10:56 PM       View Profile for Jenn E   Email Jenn E   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jenn E

I will simply say that one should always be honest. If you are unhappy in your marrige or having difficulty with anything you MUST tell them  BEFORE you do anything to hurt them I KNOW. I take my own advice here. Honesty, especially about feelings is so very important and the one your with will be less hurt in the end.....if you don't work it out first.

Very good subject to write about.
Jenn E
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15 posted 08-31-2000 12:41 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

AliCat~

Quite the well crafted piece.
Well said, my friend.
~*Marge*~


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aLLo again AliCat, I really enjoyed this poem you've shared and my compliments to you for the great expression in verse...

I must admit that upon reading the posted replies I too had same thoughts as Rebel .. the gender could be male being baited by the female  

Your poem has struck many perspectives and in my eyes this is a great achievement.

Coco  
Sudhir Iyer
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17 posted 08-31-2000 03:34 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

An excellent poem....

I loved the way you kept this unbiased in gender terms...

regards,
sudhir...
LngJhnAg
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18 posted 08-31-2000 07:42 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

I sure hope Sonjes is lucky, because I feel the same way as her, and that means I must be lucky, too!

This is a good poem, Ali - filled with some very good insights.  As for Rebel's comment about gender...  In most societies, it is the man's responsibility to propose, but in reality, it is the woman who chooses the one who will propose.  I have no doubts that it takes two to tango... only I'm not sure who is the lead.  The recent studies of gender-specific communication skills, whereby women use an incredibly large portion of their brain compared to men, leads me to believe that most men are way out of their league when it comes to communicating their thoughts and desires to women.  It's what makes the world go 'round.
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19 posted 08-31-2000 05:25 PM       View Profile for Marsha   Email Marsha   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marsha's Home Page   View IP for Marsha

Ali wow no words can communicate how this hits home. Very well written, no ifs, no buts this is stunning, almost knocked me off my chair. I wonder is it something in the air, because everywhere I look couples are breaking up! C'est la vie so the saying goes, well some life, but sunshine can't be far away I know. I'll keep looking!
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20 posted 09-01-2000 09:50 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee



Perfectly written with flair! I will never understand why anyone would commit adultery, it just sickens me, I have always believed in trust and faithfulness within a marriage for, it is a ssacred gift from God. This is One of your best!  All should read this piece.

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly

Alicat
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21 posted 09-10-2000 10:44 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Thank you all for your wonderful responses, witty insights, and thought-provoking questions. The form was chosen for its 'game' heritage, for some do view such as a game, unfortuned. The content was purposely left neuter and neutral, for both genders do such. I really didn't expect the reception this limerick received, but I thank you all most heartedly for taking the time to read.
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22 posted 09-10-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

WOW! Hard hitting and to the point. I admire your writing.  
~DreamChild~
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23 posted 12-10-2004 11:59 AM       View Profile for ~DreamChild~   Email ~DreamChild~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~DreamChild~

Haha! Very funny Alicat.
I did get a laugh outta this one.
It was a good write.
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