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Can I Tell you a Secret
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Can I Tell you a Secret |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Can I Tell you a Secret? Can I tell you a secret? whisper it against the sweet curve of your flowered ear, light it with the power of my breath, it is a love song you know, it is blues it is the opera of my heart. Do you want to hear? Can you listen to this wind that tortures the bluff and blows the surf across reflection? It is hungry for a lusting ear it is a fruit filled ambrosia. Your listening has music that fills me, the quiet ear sings so sweet with eyes like trumpets and breath, curved violin, you finger my rhythm guitar as you slide towards my lips. Can I tell you a secret? Do you want to hear? You must listen or the sound just falls beneath the microphone into the orchestra pit and I will never play this song again. |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
I loved each and every word. Great work. Keep it up.  Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
closer.... won't you whisper in my ear? Say the words I want to heeeaaaaar? I'm in love with.....your poetry  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ On whispered breath of song ... your poetry sighs. Gosh, you're good !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Zeonex--Thank you for such words...I do appreciate your reply. Balladeer--and I am in love with you..re replies!! Marge--Gosh you're sweet! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Martie...this is so dear to me...I thank you so much, I swear I read everything you write...ouch...swear? nevermind, but I do try to read everything you write...always a luscious feast of words... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You told me that it was just between you and I ..... what happened.lol..... Beautiful piece here my dear friend. You know I loved it. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I'll say 2 things: #1 "Your listening has music that fills me, the quiet ear sings so sweet with eyes like trumpets and breath, curved violin, you finger my rhythm guitar as you slide towards my lips." is a verse I now find engraved on my memory. #2 - I've learned in my years: Never say never~S~ - absolutely fabulous piece Martie - your poetry always thrills me |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
As a musician, you pulled me in easily with this one, my friend!! This has all the lasting quality of a music classic....great lyrics, and I can feel the melody! Wonderful writing here! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
How beautiful. And an interesting way to pose the question. Loved it. catalinamoon |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Oh Martie baby, you can whisper in my ear anytime... please. Parker |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Wow...what a beautiful piece... Loved it! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Where's that publisher when we need him? Oh, Martie, haven't you got the picture yet? These words should be in print in your own collection of poetry. I keep telling you that and I hope one day soon it will happen.Your genius for involving the reader in a situation should be experienced by many. Love ya Liz |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity--you are so cute...thank you for reading just this one...I always appreciate your replies. Mark--Thanks for being so understanding and such a good friend. Bill--Your reply makes me smile... Sunny--what a wonderful thing to say...thank you for hearing the music. catalinamoon--thank you for letting me know that you enjoyed this poem...so glad. Parker--(Whisper, whisper--"any time") LM--Thanks so much for the Wow--What a great word. Liz---thank you for your belief in me...just find me a publisher |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"Can you listen to this wind that tortures the bluff and blows the surf across reflection?" An extraordinary vision this paints in my mind. Wondrous work, Martie! You have a great talent. *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
The wonder of this piece whispered "loudly" to me as I read, Martie. Just lovely, this. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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