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On the way |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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On the way I've dwelled upon relationships Of those within my diadem. On my vanity and the pain The salt and pepper dusting them. I've thought upon those inner prods And the terrors and the tolls. Judging my best those constant drives And the tortures and controls? I've analyzed the lovely rose The hazards of the thorns and stem. The wondrous beauty of the bud The dangers of collecting them. I've pondered female parallels Their lovely forms and altered states. Swam the swirling impasse eddies Over come their inebriate. Still I have pricked a thorn or two And bloodied often in the coup. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your imagery has me smiling today...bloodied though you be, your soul sings to me... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Another gem, my friend You must know that all roses have thorns, byt sometimes you can remove them This is a lovely poem Love Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, I'm glad I sing to someone. Elizabeth, You and Sunshine are the only two who responded I guess nobody loves me anymore. Love Sy |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"I've analyzed the lovely rose The hazards of the thorns and stem. The wondrous beauty of the bud The dangers of collecting them." oh yes, Mr. Sy... i still love ya!!! this is really well done... the stanza above is wonderfully spoken... i have always said that a rose is the perfect picture of Romantic Love.... it looks so beautiful you have to have it... the petals are soft, silky, reflecting light and the scent is absolutely so alluring that you cannot help but partake again and again and again... and... if you touch the petals too harshly, they turn brown and die too quickly, falling off before their time... the thorns will stab you and bring blood, no matter how delicately you try to pick it up and hold it from it's stem... eventually (actually, pretty darn quickly), the head droops and the darn thing dies... petals are all over the floor and you have to vaccuum or sweep them up and toss them into a brown paper back to be taken out to the trash barrel... and still there's the stem... and you have to get rid of that, too, and when you get close enough to pick it up, the thorns still stab and cut and bleed you...  call me a cynic... so what? LOL... what's wrong with a sardonic sense of humor anyway? hehe... seriously, though, my love for this poem (and you) is much more substantial and long lasting than my analogy...  forgive me for having a little fun with words... thanks for a GREAT read!!! ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
See? Doreen loves you and I love you and Sunshine loves you and I know Corinne loves you and so does Nan and JM and the French girl. You are very well loved and so is your poetry Love LIz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
And I'm rather fond of you myself, Seymour. Loved this one, you ole dwelling collector, you.  ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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menage a demideux Junior Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 32 |
Oui! Oui! Je t'adore, mon amour!!! Pleez remembering theez elle de Francais... theez girl, too, mon sweet chocolate! *SMOOCH* |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
uh, Sy, I'm not positive I can go so far as to say I love you because LongJohn or Toe may be lurking around looking for ammo but I can certainly say I love the way you turn a phrase...will that do for now??? and I certainly like this one....  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Doreen, Enjoyed your syllogism, a delight to read. *L* Elizabeth, Love you. Claire, I was only kidding, fond of you too. *L* Manage, Where have you been, I smooch you back. Balladeer, Understand your dilemma, Thanks for the like. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I love ya, Sy.....  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, Oh my, A rose without a thorn. Love ya too. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Fantastic work, Seymour... My friend, your poetry has me numbed and sets me thinking at the same time... incredible isn't it... must be the dragons within.... regards, sudhir |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, Just wanted to thank you before this disappeared. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Good things always have a way of coming back to the top...especially when we are loved... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, You are very much loved. *L* |
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