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Some Say Love.... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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One day you watched a child laugh And a tear rolled down your cheek That day a sunset found you Your heart skipped though so weak When all you’ve seen and done Falls a smile upon your face Don’t ever think you’re finished You’ve laid touch upon this place Don’t feel foolish or a bother There’s honor in your years Don’t feel you failed me father There’s cherish in your tears You never said you loved me We got close and then you died That time you cried for laughter I knew the words were deep inside There're hard men who live hard lives Never to let such feelings show An honest man bears, "I love you" There are children who need to know What made you cry that evening? Was it that boy’s joyful laughter? I'm grown up now but you can tell me Or I can wait for the ever after There’s peace in this remembrance How easy to fill in the blanks Love, I recall so easily And daddy I whisper thanks. [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 08-28-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh Walt...when I can see thru these tears you have caused... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
touching...love...we all want to hear the words and feel the desire...James |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
So incredibly beautiful and touching, Walt.  *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
See I told you this brought tears! That last stanza didn't ruin it all buddy, it just added a lot more touch to it! You've not lost it all. I told ya once and I'll say it again, this was a deep and very moving poem! Reaches right in there and touches the heart Walt! You've written an exquisite poem here! You keep this one safe for the next book submission!!! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Definately a keeper. Wonderful poetry. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Walty, this is so beautiful and so very touching. WOW! |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Walt...man, you just simply reached down inside me and pulled some strings. My dad is one of those hard men who lived hard times, and though he very rarely uttered those words, his actions shouted them. Thank you, my brother Texan, for the rememberances. Alicat, still Texan at heart |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you guys yuh i was readin ole "falling up" by shel silverstein (have to borrow my inspirational writers from my kids library) and i was gonna write somethin like that but o the trip to gettin into University i had it on the memories station and they played "the Rose" so much i couldnt get it outta my head so theres my inspiration that great wonderful song yuh yuh and grandad of course!! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ Great reflections shared here. It's wonderful when the song can inspire you to reach in and hum the memories. 'One day you watched a child laugh And a tear rolled down your cheek' Tenderly done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx marge yuh tiz a sweet song now it just needs to get outta muh head yuh yuh |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
an incredible poem from a remarkable poet...So glad that you are well, and to bless us with the grace of your beautiful poetry again walt....welcome back, and thank you for this one. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Walt, You are, I believe, a treasure to all who know you. I sure love the way you express your tender self. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Walt ... Welcome Back! What an incredibly beautiful poem, tugged at my heart so hard I thouht I'd lose my breath. Just so sweet and tender Walt ... great work! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A most incredible poem... Walt, Welcome back... I hope you are keeping up with your health... regards, sudhir |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx to know know know me is to love love love me and i do and i do oo oo |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh WOW |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
hold on I can't type through my tears...Ok taht's better I can see now.....this is very sad...reminded me of my father.....though i never really knew him in a strange way it reminded me of him......great post... Julie :) |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
This does touch my heart! Very nice! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
This is the third time I have come here to reply to this Walt. Probably any thought I have on the poem are skewed. The first time my Dad told me he loved me was mere seconds before he passed away. I am so glad he was able to. Thanks for a great poem. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very touching and very beautifully done, Walt! Denise |
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