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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Never thought this would happen That love would find me this way Experienced in this hard world You’ve truly blown me away Your friends are so dismayed My friends say we are fools But we can’t stop this loving Though it breaks all the rules You are my California dream Your smile melts my heart And though you are younger You’ve captured this woman’s heart! Now we face each new day together Enduring each stare, each secret smirk Soul mates against all life’s odds Determined to make this work. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is so hauntingly familiar...smiles to you...even sounds like the same guy...lol and a wink and a prayer for you...just perfect. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
It turned out just perfect! I love it Sharon! This sounds like my husband and me LOL, though people tried to keep us apart, and my parents didn't like him, we're still together 16 years later!  |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Hi PDV .. gotta tell ya gurl this one is toooooooo sweet you had me smiling thru each verse  Regards, Coco |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"Soulmates against all life's odds Determined to make this work." -- Defintely the right additude to have, Ms. deVine. Sweet and wonderful writing! *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
i enjoyed this much especially the end where you say.... Soul mates against all life’s odds Determined to make this work. sounds kinda like me in a way b/c i am transferring to a school near my boifriends i am determined to make us work too..great writing and inspiration "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sharon, this is Wonderful!! Loved it and this ... Soul mates against all life’s odds Determined to make this work. Thats the spirit! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
You go girl - I couldn't be happier for you |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Hey go for it big time......I am going for mine. Very wonderful work here. |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
PVD, How sweet and so romantic, and may all your dreams and realities match. Linda M. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Go for it and dont let anyone tell you no different Lovely poem btw."Those who will not learn to use this instrument well cannot be saved by an expanded alphabet; they will only afflict us with expanded gibberish" ~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi Sharon, what a wonderful, happy and determined writing. I have to go with the rest...go for it, and may you find happiness and love with your California dream. (I am on my way in a month, to work on my personal California dream) catalinamoon |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
deVine. . . as always, it's so wonderful to see new work from your pen. . . I know that it's been a while. . . Excellent my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dear Sharon; being an incurble romantic myself.... I fell in love with your poem and I am soooo happy for you! Go for the whole gift you've been given, and live every minute to the fullest. Love, Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
PdV-Breaking rules, soulmates, smiles that break hearts.....All of the ingredients for a wonderful romance!!! Simply beautiful poem. Bonnie |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I can remember the feeling this conjures from my past ... thanks for the smiles and Best Wishes to you |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Juls |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Ah...true love finds its ways to people in the most unrecognizable forms... Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Hey, aren't rules made to be broken? What happens happens, because it's meant to happen! Elizabeth |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ah yes... I certainly understand such determination.... Well written, my friend..  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ahhhh Poet deVine ... with positive thoughts like this, there's no stoppin' ya gal! Great poem, now ... Go get em! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ain't love grand?! Denise |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
OOOOOh, Sharon! *wink wink* This is a beautiful love poem. Don't listen to what anyone else says, just listen to your heart. (But I don't need to tell you that! )"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The longing and the love show in every beautiful line...best wishes that your heart will be held with care~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Nicely done Ms. Give them some good luck to go with that determination! Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for you kind comments and good wishes. Now for a question: Do you post poetry that reflects your life all the time? This may not reflect mine!!  Just a thought..... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
so it's not you pdv awww yuh yuh come on it is and you dont wanna let the guys know you might be gettin serious yuh thats it i'm so smart!!! nice one this was yuh |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
My answer would have to be yes...it is the only way for me. |
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CAVECANEM Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 43Nevada USA |
Some times it memories, other times it dreams, some times the future or what we think it seems. Regardless it's great work...I like it |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
LOL--you and everyone else surely know that I do---why would I make it up when there is so much already there to write about...if I can only remember it all...LOL and hugs to you sharon.... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I believe it was Ron who said: quote: Hmmm... I'm from California...  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Wonderfully done poem, Poet deVine... regards, sudhir |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Smiling deeply at the overwheminly possitive undertones of this one be it real or just a dream |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind replies. What is an older woman to do when she 'falls' for a younger man? It's ok for a man to fall for someone younger..it's a backslapping, well done, good ole' boy tradition! But for women? It's looked at as somehow wrong! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Strange, it always seemed to me that a man who fell for a younger woman was looked at as a 'pervert' and no one approved. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Goddess PDV... I assure you... tis not viewed as wrong in this day and age... and don't friends suck when you're in love? lol... nice poem and kudos to ya! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
PdV - Whether this is autobiographical or not...y'done good! Now, if it is autobio - take care of that heart of yours... If it's a crock - go for the gusto and spin another spell, weave another weave, and loop another loop! [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 08-28-2000).] |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
All right hold it right there!! This is the Love Police! May I see some identification please? There has been reports of a woman and a young man breaking love rules around here. Now there can only be heart melting if the hearts get warmed up again later on! All right will you two separate your lips for just a…. HEY!! PUT HER DOWN!! Partner call in for backup NOW!!! We have a code 1 in progress!! OK Buddy take it real easy! Just put the woman down! Are you OK ma'am? "Yes, I'm in love" Now listen if this is an emergency just jump in your car and follow me I can get you two to her place a lot quicker. I'll just put on the sirens and the flashing lights and we will not stop for any red lights on the way!! I'll be watching in my rearview mirror so keep your hands where I can see them. That goes for the both of ya!!  |
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